工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct articles and verb forms (e.g., “a Japanese restaurant located on Cockpan Street”). Avoid redundancy (“because the area is popular for visitors” and “attracts many tourists” tell the same thing).

示例: I work as a waitress at a Japanese restaurant on Cockpan Street. The area is popular with visitors, so we receive many tourists every day, which gives me good practice serving different customers.

建议: Give a clear main sentence, then one specific detail with correct grammar and linking words. Correct singular/plural and contractions (e.g., “customers who have been to Japan”). Explain what makes it authentic with a precise example.

示例: I work at a Japanese restaurant in Aldertown, Edinburgh. It feels authentic because we import traditional soup bases from Japan, so even customers who have been to Japan often say our food tastes familiar.

建议: Answer directly then give one clear reason with correct phrasing and linking words. Avoid vague sentences like “I can't do anything without work.” Instead explain the impact of long shifts on life. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Not really — the long shifts make it difficult for me. I often work more than ten hours a day, so I have little time for studying or social life. I would prefer daytime shifts so I could do other activities in the evenings.

建议: Be concise and correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a topic sentence then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix tense (e.g., “I have worked as a supervisor” or “I worked as a supervisor”) and improve clarity about colleagues’ qualities and training experience.

示例: Yes, I like working there because my colleagues are friendly and supportive. I have worked as a supervisor, so I trained new staff, which showed me they are hardworking and eager to learn quickly.

建议: Respond with a clear plan sentence and one specific step using correct collocations (e.g., “a marketing role in an international company,” “a master's degree,” “this autumn”). Avoid repetition and use linking words to show purpose.

示例: I plan to work in marketing for an international company, so this autumn I will start a master’s degree in marketing. I hope to learn advanced skills and practical strategies that I can apply in my future career.

× I work as a waitress in Japanese restaurant which is located on Cockpan St.

✓ I work as a waitress in a Japanese restaurant which is located on Cockpan St.

The noun 'Japanese restaurant' needs the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular, countable noun being mentioned for the first time. Use 'a' before consonant sounds (a Japanese). Suggestion: include 'a' before singular countable nouns when they are not definite or previously introduced.

× Because the area is popular for visitors, our restaurant attracts many tourists every day.

✓ Because the area is popular with visitors, our restaurant attracts many tourists every day.

This is primarily a preposition choice error: 'popular with' is the correct collocation in English (popular with people), not 'popular for'. The verb 'attracts' is correct for singular subject 'restaurant'. Suggestion: learn common adjective-preposition collocations (popular with, interested in).

× I work at the Japanese restaurant in Aldertown, Edinburgh.

✓ I work at a Japanese restaurant in Aldertown, Edinburgh.

If the speaker has not previously identified a specific restaurant, use the indefinite article 'a'. Also the original 'the Japanese restaurant' implies a specific one known to listener. Choose 'a' unless referring to a specific known restaurant. Suggestion: use 'a' for non-specific singular nouns and 'the' for specific ones.

× It's very authentic because we import soup from Japan directly.

✓ It's very authentic because we import soup directly from Japan.

Word order is more natural as 'import X from Japan' with the adverb 'directly' placed before the source or after the verb phrase. Also no article needed for 'soup' in general. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'directly' next to the verb or source phrase: 'import ... directly from ...'.

× Even customer who've been to Japan enjoy it.

✓ Even customers who've been to Japan enjoy it.

Plural 'customers' is required to agree with the implicit plural idea and the verb contraction 'who've' (who have) requires a plural antecedent. Using singular 'customer' with 'who've' is inconsistent. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches verb form: use 'customers who've' or 'a customer who's'.

× No it is not because the shift is too long.

✓ No, it is not, because the shifts are too long.

If referring to the general situation of workdays, plural 'shifts' is more natural. Also commas improve sentence flow. If speaker means a particular shift, 'the shift is too long' is acceptable; choose consistency. Suggestion: match singular/plural to intended meaning and punctuate for clarity.

× It's more than 10 hours on my work day.

✓ My work day is more than 10 hours long.

Word order and expression are incorrect. Use 'my work day is X hours long' or 'I work more than 10 hours a day.' Also 'work day' is usually 'workday' or 'working day.' Suggestion: use natural time expressions: 'I work more than 10 hours a day.'

× I can't do anything without work.

✓ I can't do anything because of work.

'Without work' suggests unemployment; the intended meaning is that work prevents other activities. Use 'because of work' or 'due to work' to express cause. Suggestion: use 'because of' to indicate reason; avoid 'without' when you mean 'because of'.

× I prefer work daytime and do something in night time.

✓ I prefer to work during the daytime and do things at night.

Use verb infinitive after 'prefer' when comparing actions: 'prefer to work'. Also use 'during the daytime' and 'at night' as natural time expressions, and pluralize 'things' for general activities. Suggestion: use 'prefer to + verb' and natural prepositions for time: 'during', 'at'.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question is fine but the student's later response should correspond. This item flagged for consistency: 'Would you like' asks if they would want it; 'Do you like' asks current opinion. Suggestion: use 'Do you like...' to ask about present feelings.

× Yes, I like the place where I work because my colleagues are very nice and friendly to me and I worked as a supervisor so I trained my colleague before.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because my colleagues are very nice and friendly to me. I worked as a supervisor, so I trained my colleagues before.

Use plural 'colleagues' and 'colleagues' trained (plural). The past tense 'worked' is fine for a past role; 'trained my colleague before' should be 'trained my colleagues before' for consistency or 'trained a colleague' if singular. Also add punctuation to separate sentences. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches and separate ideas with proper punctuation.

× They are so hard work to learn to something quickly it makes.

✓ They work very hard to learn things quickly.

Original is ungrammatical. 'Hard work' is a noun phrase; to describe effort use 'work hard' or 'work very hard'. 'To learn something quickly' should be 'to learn things quickly.' Suggestion: use verb 'work' with adverb 'hard' and place purpose clause correctly: 'to learn ... quickly.'

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

This examiner question is correct; no correction needed. No action required.

× I plan to be a marketer in international company, that's why I'm planning to go university to get master course in this autumn.

✓ I plan to be a marketer in an international company; that's why I'm planning to go to university to take a master's course this autumn.

Several article and preposition errors: use 'an international company' (indefinite article before vowel sound), 'go to university' needs 'to' before university, 'take a master's course' is natural phrasing and 'this autumn' not 'in this autumn.' Also avoid repeating 'plan/ planning' — use one. Suggestion: use correct articles ('a/an'), prepositions ('to university'), and common collocations ('master's course').

× I will study hard there and learn new things to use in my future.

✓ I will study hard there and learn new things to use in my future career.

Add a noun after 'future' for clarity; 'future' alone is vague. 'Future career' clarifies intent. Tense 'will study' is appropriate. Suggestion: specify 'future career' or 'in the future' depending on meaning.