工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は意図は伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。まずは簡潔なトピック文（職業）を述べ、次に仕事内容を具体的に補足してください。冠詞や単数・複数、時制、前置詞（at/in/for）の使い方を直し、文章を5文以内にまとめる練習をしてください。例えば“I work as a graphic designer. I design packaging, flyers and websites.”のように、短く明確な文をつなぐと自然になります。

示例: I work as a graphic designer. I design packaging, flyers and websites. I’m employed full-time and mainly create visual materials for product launches. I also collaborate with marketing teams to ensure the designs fit the brand.

建议: 場所の説明はできますが語順や語の選択が不自然です。“I work in Osaka, Japan”のように地名を自然な順で述べ、職場の種類は“at a technology company”など正しい表現を使いましょう。通勤時間や感情の補足は短い追加文で。接続詞でつなぐ練習も有効です。

示例: I work in Osaka, Japan at a technology company. It takes about 40 minutes to commute from my home. I enjoy the job because the atmosphere is creative and supportive.

建议: 肯定はできていますが、理由の提示が曖昧で文法エラーがあります。“my designs encourage other people”は意味は通りますが自然な説明（how they help）を加えると良いです。“My company provides services to high school students”のように目的語や関係を明確にしましょう。具体例（プロジェクトや成果）を一つ挙げると説得力が増します。

示例: Yes, it is. I enjoy the job because I can help clients through my designs. For example, I created a flyer campaign that increased attendance at a school event. My company mainly provides services for high school students, so we focus on youth-oriented branding.

建议: 答えが冗長で文法や語順の誤りが多いです。まず短い肯定文を述べ、次に具体的な理由を1～2文で示してください。例えば“Because I like collaborating with colleagues”のように“collaborate with colleagues”を使うと自然です。“hire a graphic design I to do”は意味不明なので“work with other designers”などに言い換えましょう。

示例: Yes, I like my workplace. I enjoy collaborating with my colleagues because teamwork is essential for our projects. I often work with other designers and the communication helps us produce better results.

建议: 計画を述べていますが構成と文法が不十分で伝わりにくいです。将来の目標を明確な主語＋述語で述べ、そのために現在何をしているかを具体的に示してください（勉強内容や習得したいスキル）。接続詞を使って理由をつなぐと論理的になります。

示例: I want to specialize in branding, while continuing graphic and web design. I’m currently studying branding strategies and visual identity design to improve my skills. This will help my work contribute more to clients’ business growth.

× Yes I do. I'm working now I employment as a salary.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm currently employed and receive a salary.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and nouns ('I employment as a salary') and omits necessary auxiliary verbs. Use 'employed' (adjective) to indicate having a job and 'receive a salary' to express payment. Add 'currently' to match present continuous context and commas for clarity.

× My job is graphic designer.

✓ My job is a graphic designer.

A job role should be introduced with an indefinite article: 'a graphic designer.' Alternatively, say 'I am a graphic designer.' The article is required because 'graphic designer' is a singular countable noun.

× I make package and flyer and web design.

✓ I design packaging, flyers, and websites.

Use the verb 'design' with plural nouns for typical items. 'Package' should be 'packaging' and 'web design' is better expressed as 'websites.' Use commas and 'and' for list clarity.

× I work in Japan, Osaka and technology is my job place.

✓ I work in Osaka, Japan, and my workplace is a technology company.

Place names usually use commas: 'Osaka, Japan.' 'Job place' is unnatural; use 'workplace' and specify 'a technology company.' Also connect clauses with 'and' properly.

× It takes 40 minutes from my home.

✓ It takes 40 minutes to get there from my home.

Clarify direction: use 'to get there from my home' or 'I commute 40 minutes from my home.' The original lacks the destination and a verb phrase indicating movement.

× I enjoy the job.

✓ I enjoy my job.

Add the possessive 'my' to specify which job. Present simple 'enjoy' is correct, but noun needs modifier.

× Yes it is. I enjoy the job because I like design and my design encourage other people.

✓ Yes, it is. I enjoy the job because I like design and my designs encourage other people.

'Design' as a countable outcome should be plural 'designs' when referring to multiple works. 'Encourage' must agree with plural subject 'designs.' Also add commas for natural speech.

× My company, the service is high school students employment.

✓ My company's service is employment for high school students.

Original word order is incorrect. Use the possessive 'my company's' and clarify 'employment for high school students.' This corrects article and word order problems.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question is fine, but the student's following answer used an incorrect modal. For the student's reply below, 'Yes I would. I would.' is incorrect contextually; use simple 'Yes, I do' or 'Yes, I like it.' The modal 'would' implies hypothetical.

× Yes I would. I would. I love the place where I work because I like to communicate other people in company because it is necessary to work together and hire a graphic design I to do.

✓ Yes, I do. I love the place where I work because I like communicating with other people in the company; it's necessary to work together, and we hire graphic designers to do the work.

Multiple issues: 'would' is wrong for a current preference—use 'do.' Use the gerund 'communicating with' and correct preposition 'with.' 'In company' should be 'in the company.' Sentence needed punctuation and restructuring. 'Hire a graphic design I to do' is ungrammatical; change to 'we hire graphic designers.'

× What are your future work plans?

✓ (Student's intended reply) My future plans are to continue working in graphic and web design, and I am interested in branding design.

Original student response fragment 'It is graphic design and web design and I'm interested in branding design.' lacks subject and clear structure. Provide a complete sentence: 'My future plans are to continue...' Maintain present continuous for ongoing study 'I am studying it now.'

× I I'm studying it now because I my graphic design contribute.

✓ I'm studying it now because I want my graphic design to contribute.

The original has missing words and incorrect word order. Use 'want' plus infinitive 'to contribute' to express intention. Ensure single contractions and complete clause: 'I'm studying it now because I want my graphic design to contribute.'