工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答需要更自然、语法更准确并直接回应问题。注意句子结构与时态，避免冗余（例如“by the way”、“also”重复意思）。可开门见山说明身份，然后简短补充兼职情况与时间点。

示例: I’m currently a university student. I usually take on part-time jobs during the school holidays to earn some extra money and gain experience.

建议: 回答需要纠正词汇和语法（例如“worked at a Chinese canteen”，“served customers”，“street smarts”复数）。句子应更连贯，用连接词解释原因和结果，并避免冗长。

示例: I used to work at a Chinese canteen, where I prepared food and served customers. It was very busy and exhausting, but after I left I realized I had gained a lot of street smarts and practical experience.

建议: 回答内容方向正确，但需要更流畅的连接和更准确的时态。避免句子内部突兀的转折，使用连接词（however, although, because）。提供具体例子说明如何学会时间管理。

示例: To be honest, it wasn’t a great place to work because the pay was low. However, it was perfect for learning time management, because during busy lunchtimes I had to prioritize tasks and serve many customers quickly.

建议: 注意词汇错误（应为“canteen”而不是“candy”）。回答应先直接表态，再用一两句具体理由支持，比如描述与顾客互动或团队氛围。控制在最多五句内。

示例: Yes, I really liked working at the canteen because it was inside a supermarket and always busy. I enjoyed meeting different customers and working with friendly colleagues, which improved my communication skills.

建议: 想法明确，但表达需要更自然、理由更具体。避免模糊词（“huge pressure”），可以说明想学到的技能或行业，并解释为什么创业对你有吸引力。

示例: I plan to start my own business after I graduate because I want to be independent and learn practical skills like management and decision-making. I know it will be risky, but I believe the challenges will help me grow professionally.

× I'm currently starting as university but I usually take on part time jobs during school holidays, so by the way I'm also working as well.

✓ I'm currently starting university, but I usually take part-time jobs during school holidays, and I'm also working now.

句子结构和用词不当：原句中“starting as university”不符合英语表达，正确说法是“starting university”或“starting at university”。“take on part time jobs”建议改为“take part-time jobs”。“so by the way I'm also working as well”冗余且口语混乱，改为“and I'm also working now”。建议在表达多层信息时用并列连接（and/but）并避免冗余词。

× I used to work as a Chinese canteen where I prepared food and serve the customers.

✓ I used to work in a Chinese canteen where I prepared food and served the customers.

时态和介词错误：用词应为“work in a canteen”而不是“work as a canteen”。句中描述过去习惯性工作应使用过去时，动词“serve”需与上下文过去时一致，改为“served”。

× It was not until I left the canteen that I realized I have attained a lot of street smart.

✓ It was not until I left the canteen that I realized I had attained a lot of street smarts.

时态错误和名词用法：主句为过去时（realized），因此从句的完成时应使用过去完成时（had attained）。“street smart”应为复数短语“street smarts”。

× To be honest, it wasn't a good place to work, but it's a perfect place to learn time management Because we were so busy at lunchtime, this job wasn't well paid, but I learned how to prioritize responsibilities.

✓ To be honest, it wasn't a good place to work, but it was a great place to learn time management. Because we were so busy at lunchtime, the job wasn't well paid, but I learned how to prioritize responsibilities.

句子时态与大小写问题：前半句与整体过去背景一致，应用过去时“it was a great place”。“time management Because”中间缺少句号并且Because应小写连接从句，改为分句或使用小写连词。此外“this job”改为更自然的“the job”。保持时态一致能使表达清晰。

× I really like the candy where I work because it is inside the supermarket and always very busy so I can meet many different customers and colleagues.

✓ I really like the canteen where I work because it is inside the supermarket and is always very busy, so I can meet many different customers and colleagues.

用词错误：“candy”是糖果，显然应为“canteen”（食堂）。句子需添加连词和补充“is”使结构完整，并在“busy”和“so”之间加逗号使句子更流畅。

× I plan to start my own business after I graduate because it is full of risks and I can learn a lot from the huge pressure.

✓ I plan to start my own business after I graduate because it will be full of risks and I can learn a lot from the pressure.

时态与表达自然性：描述将来的情况应使用“will be”而不是现在时“is”。“the huge pressure”表达不自然，改为简单的“the pressure”。也可说“learn a lot from the challenge/pressure”。