工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, accurate and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your current status, avoid contradictory timeframes (saying both five years and more than 20 years creates confusion), and limit to up to 3–4 short sentences. Use linking words (e.g., but, before, recently) to show sequence and reason.

示例: I am currently working as a scientist in industry. I previously spent over five years working at a university lab before moving into the private sector. Recently I changed companies to take up a more senior position because I wanted greater responsibility and impact.

建议: Good detail and role clarity. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement) and tighten language. Combine sentences using linking words (for example, because or therefore) to show purpose and make the answer slightly more natural and concise.

示例: I work for a biopharmaceutical company that produces skin-regenerating fillers. As the principal scientist, I design and characterize these products so that patients with severe skin injuries can recover function and appearance.

建议: Answer is positive and specific but reduce redundancy and fix small style issues ('work–life balance', 'emphasize professional development'). Use linking words to connect points and give one concrete example of an opportunity to illustrate your claim.

示例: Yes, it's a great place to work because the culture is diverse and inclusive, and the company supports work–life balance. For example, they offer regular training programs and innovation grants that help employees develop new ideas.

建议: Clear and relevant. Improve fluency by avoiding repetition (you mentioned inclusivity and training earlier). Use one linking word and add a brief specific example (what training, or how colleagues support you) to make it more vivid.

示例: Yes, I enjoy working here because my colleagues are very supportive and we collaborate well. For instance, my team holds weekly problem-solving meetings and the company runs quarterly workshops that have helped me learn new laboratory techniques.

建议: Good ambition and content but fix grammar and structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to list concrete steps you will take (e.g., by, through). Limit to 2–3 concise sentences and include one specific action (e.g., lead multidisciplinary trials, take leadership training).

示例: My long-term goal is to become an effective leader in regenerative medicine. To achieve this, I plan to lead multidisciplinary translational projects and attend formal leadership training to improve team management and collaboration with clinical partners.

× I've been working for five years now.

✓ I have worked for five years now.

The student used present perfect continuous which is acceptable, but context later says 'I have been at a school for more than 20 years and I started my job in industry as a scientist.' To keep tense consistency and express a duration up to now, the present perfect simple ('have worked') is clearer here. Use 'I have worked for five years' to indicate total duration of work experience without emphasizing ongoing action.

× I have been at a school for more than 20 years and I started my job in industry as a scientist.

✓ I was at a school for more than 20 years, and I started my job in industry as a scientist.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('have been') with a past-time event ('started') without clear time reference. If the school employment is finished, use past simple: 'I was at a school for more than 20 years.' Keep 'I started my job in industry as a scientist' in past simple because it refers to a completed action. If the school employment is ongoing, rephrase both clauses to present perfect consistent with ongoing status.

× I changed my company recently to a higher position.

✓ I changed companies recently for a higher position.

Use 'changed companies' (common collocation) rather than 'changed my company'. Also use 'for' to indicate the reason or 'to take a higher position' could work. 'Recently' fits with past simple: 'I changed companies recently for a higher position.'

× I work for a biopharmaceutical company that produce fillers for regenerating the skin.

✓ I work for a biopharmaceutical company that produces fillers for regenerating the skin.

The relative clause modifies 'company' (singular), so the verb must be singular: 'produces' not 'produce'.

× ...that produce fillers for regenerating the skin.

✓ ...that produces fillers for regenerating the skin.

Besides subject-verb agreement, 'regenerating the skin' is acceptable as a participial phrase, but ensure the main verb agrees with singular 'company'. Consider 'to regenerate skin' as an alternative: 'produces fillers to regenerate skin.'

× Patients who injure their skin in accidents can benefit from these fillers.

✓ Patients who injure their skin in accidents can benefit from these fillers.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Included here for completeness.

× I am the principal scientist who is responsible for designing and characterizing these fillers.

✓ I am the principal scientist who is responsible for designing and characterizing these fillers.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. 'Who is responsible' correctly agrees with 'scientist'.

× It's a great workplace, their culture is very diverse and inclusive, and they pay attention to work life balance and emphasize on the professional development of the employees.

✓ It's a great workplace; its culture is very diverse and inclusive, and it pays attention to work-life balance and emphasizes the professional development of employees.

Use 'its' (possessive pronoun) to refer to 'workplace' rather than 'their'. Also use singular agreement 'it pays' for the company/place. 'Work-life' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. 'Emphasize on' is incorrect; use 'emphasizes the professional development' or 'emphasizes professional development'. Remove 'the' before 'employees' or keep depending on meaning; 'employees' without 'the' is natural.

× You can find tons of opportunities to grow and innovate.

✓ You can find many opportunities to grow and innovate.

'Tons of' is informal and may be inappropriate in a formal interview. Use 'many' or 'numerous' instead.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question should use 'Do you like...' not 'Would you like...'. 'Would you like' is used to offer something. This was likely in the transcript as examiner prompt; no student correction required. Included for clarity.

× Yes, I really enjoy working here.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy working here.

Correct as is.

× My colleagues are highly supportive and they have created a positive environment to work.

✓ My colleagues are highly supportive, and they have created a positive environment in which to work.

The clause 'environment to work' is understandable but unidiomatic. Use 'an environment in which to work' or 'a positive working environment.' Maintain comma before conjunction for clarity.

× Also, the company's culture is very inclusive and diverse, and they provide regular training that help me build my skills.

✓ Also, the company's culture is very inclusive and diverse, and it provides regular training that helps me build my skills.

'Company's culture' is singular; follow with singular verb 'it provides'. 'Training that help' should be 'training that helps' because 'training' is singular. Alternatively, use 'trainings' (rare) or 'training sessions' + 'help'.

× My professional goal is to become an effective leader in the field of regenerative medicine and has a meaningful impact on translating scientific discovery into treatments for patients and lead multidisciplinary teams and collaborate with cross functional teams.

✓ My professional goal is to become an effective leader in the field of regenerative medicine, to have a meaningful impact on translating scientific discoveries into treatments for patients, and to lead multidisciplinary, cross-functional teams.

The original sentence lacks parallel structure and has verb form errors ('has' should be 'to have'; 'lead' and 'collaborate' need 'to' for parallelism). Use infinitive forms for all parallel goals: 'to become', 'to have', 'to lead'. Also pluralize 'discoveries' and hyphenate 'cross-functional'. This corrects sentence structure and maintains future-oriented professional goals.