工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid repeating the same information. You can make your response more concise and natural by combining ideas and using linking words.

示例: I am both studying and working at the same time because I want to support myself by paying my tuition fees for the next semester.

建议: Your answer is direct but could be improved by adding a linking word and a bit more detail to make it more natural and informative.

示例: I currently work at the Nigerian Navy Reference Hospital, which is quite close to my school, so it's convenient for me.

建议: Good content but watch your grammar and word choice. Use 'employees' instead of 'employers' and 'check-ups' instead of 'check UPS'. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, it's an excellent place to work because they prioritize employees' health by ensuring we don't work when sick and regularly conduct medical check-ups to keep us in good condition.

建议: Your answer is good but could be more natural by using linking words and avoiding redundancy like 'definitely would' and 'more reason'.

示例: Yes, I would like to continue working there because the environment is conducive and the people are friendly, which makes it feel more like home than work.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but contains some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use 'are' instead of 'is' for plural, 'oversees' instead of 'overseas', and try to be more concise and clear.

示例: My future work plans are to secure a job at the Nigerian Navy Hospital and advance to a position like a matron, who oversees the daily activities of other nurses.

× I am currently schooling and also working.

✓ I am currently studying and also working.

The verb 'schooling' is not commonly used in this context. The correct verb to express attending school is 'studying'. Using 'studying' is more natural and grammatically correct in English.

× I'm working while schooling because I want to be able to assist myself to pay for my tuition fee for the next semester.

✓ I'm working while studying because I want to be able to support myself to pay for my tuition fee for the next semester.

Again, 'schooling' should be replaced with 'studying'. Also, 'assist myself' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'support myself' when referring to providing financial help for oneself.

× I currently work at the Nigerian Navy Reference Hospital and it's not much of a distance from where my school is.

✓ I currently work at the Nigerian Navy Reference Hospital and it's not far from where my school is.

The phrase 'not much of a distance' is awkward. The correct preposition and phrase is 'not far from' to indicate proximity.

× They also ensure we do medical check UPS and be sure that we are on optimal.

✓ They also ensure we do medical check-ups and make sure that we are in optimal health.

'Check UPS' should be 'check-ups' as a compound noun. Also, 'be sure that we are on optimal' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make sure that we are in optimal health' to express good condition.

× My future work plans is securing a job in the Nigerian Navy Hospital and attaining great heights, for example, being a matron that overseas the day-to-day activities of other nurses in the hospital.

✓ My future work plans are to secure a job in the Nigerian Navy Hospital and attain great heights, for example, being a matron who oversees the day-to-day activities of other nurses in the hospital.

'Plans is' should be 'plans are' to agree in number. 'Securing' should be 'to secure' to match the infinitive form after 'plans are'. 'Overseas' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'oversees'. Also, 'that' is better replaced with 'who' when referring to people.