工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: In your answer, try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I am a 12th-grade student studying at a high school in Phnom Penh, the capital city of Cambodia." This is more natural and clear.

示例: I am a 12th-grade student studying at a high school in Phnom Penh, the capital city of Cambodia.

建议: Try to give a direct answer first and then add details with linking words. Also, use correct grammar and vocabulary. For example, "I don't work because I am still a student. However, I volunteer in community and social activities."

示例: I don't work because I am still a student. However, I volunteer in community and social activities.

建议: Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar. For example, "Yes, I think it is a good place to work because volunteering is one of my favorite activities. It helps me assist many people, especially in Cambodia. Also, I have made many friends and enjoyed my time."

示例: Yes, I think it is a good place to work because volunteering is one of my favorite activities. It helps me assist many people, especially in Cambodia. Also, I have made many friends and enjoyed my time.

建议: Try to organize your answer with linking words and correct grammar. For example, "Yes, I like the place where I work. Although it does not pay money, it helps me grow, understand the world better, and adapt to different situations in society."

示例: Yes, I like the place where I work. Although it does not pay money, it helps me grow, understand the world better, and adapt to different situations in society.

建议: Use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, say "I want to be an economist in the government. After I finish university, I will apply for a job there. I hope this job will help me grow, earn more money, and achieve the life I have planned."

示例: I want to be an economist in the government. After I finish university, I will apply for a job there. I hope this job will help me grow, earn more money, and achieve the life I have planned.

× I still studying in the high school.

✓ I am still studying in high school.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' for the present continuous tense. In English, the present continuous tense requires the verb 'to be' plus the '-ing' form of the main verb. So, 'I still studying' should be 'I am still studying'. Also, 'the high school' is incorrect here because it refers to high school in general, so 'high school' without 'the' is better.

× I'm studying in one's high school in Phnom Penh is the capital of the city of Cambodia.

✓ I'm studying in a high school in Phnom Penh, which is the capital city of Cambodia.

The use of 'one's' is incorrect here; it should be 'a' to indicate any high school. Also, the sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. 'Phnom Penh is the capital of the city of Cambodia' is incorrect because Phnom Penh is the capital city of Cambodia, not of a city. The corrected sentence separates the ideas properly and uses 'which' to connect the clauses.

× Well I don't work, I still a student, I just study in like 1 high school in Cambodia which has many subject in it.

✓ Well, I don't work; I am still a student. I just study in a high school in Cambodia which has many subjects.

The sentence lacks proper verb 'am' in 'I still a student' and has run-on structure. Also, 'like 1 high school' is informal and 'subject' should be plural 'subjects'. Proper punctuation and verb usage improve clarity.

× But I do have volunteer in some event like in community or social activity.

✓ But I do volunteer in some events like community or social activities.

'Have volunteer' is incorrect; the verb 'volunteer' should be used directly. Also, 'event' and 'activity' should be plural to match the context. The corrected sentence uses 'do volunteer' to emphasize the action.

× Yes, I think so, because volunteering is one of my favorite activity that I would like to do and it's helped me to help a lot of people around the world more especially in the Cambodia.

✓ Yes, I think so, because volunteering is one of my favorite activities that I would like to do and it has helped me to help a lot of people around the world, especially in Cambodia.

'Activity' should be plural 'activities' because 'one of my favorite' refers to one among many. 'It's helped' should be 'it has helped' for clarity. 'More especially' is incorrect; 'especially' alone is sufficient. 'In the Cambodia' is incorrect; 'Cambodia' does not need 'the'.

× We have the people who needs our help and I also used to make a lot of friends and enjoy myself out there.

✓ We have people who need our help, and I have also made a lot of friends and enjoyed myself out there.

'The people' is unnecessary; 'people' is sufficient. 'Needs' should be 'need' to agree with plural 'people'. 'Used to make' implies past habit, but here present perfect 'have made' fits better. 'Enjoy myself' should be past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past experience.

× Yes, I think it is the best place for me to work umm, even though that work won't give me any money or any like something rewarding, but it helped me to grow, it helped me to understand the world where better and it helped me to know how to adapt to every situations in this society.

✓ Yes, I think it is the best place for me to work, even though that work doesn't give me any money or any kind of reward, but it helps me to grow, it helps me to understand the world better and it helps me to know how to adapt to every situation in this society.

'Won't give' is future tense but the context is general, so 'doesn't give' is better. 'Any like something rewarding' is informal and unclear; 'any kind of reward' is clearer. 'Helped' should be present tense 'helps' to match ongoing effect. 'Where better' is incorrect; 'better' alone suffices. 'Every situations' should be singular 'every situation'.

× Umm, well I wanna be an economics in umm, the government.

✓ Umm, well I want to be an economist in the government.

'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is correct. 'An economics' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'an economist'. 'The government' is correct here as it refers to a specific entity.

× I would apply for the job at there after I finish university and I hope that my job will help me to grow more and it helped me to earn more money in the future and have a life that I've planned and wish for.

✓ I would apply for a job there after I finish university, and I hope that my job will help me to grow more and help me to earn more money in the future and have a life that I've planned and wished for.

'Apply for the job at there' is incorrect; 'apply for a job there' is correct. 'It helped me' should be 'help me' to maintain future tense consistency. 'Wish for' should be past participle 'wished for' to match 'planned'.