工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but a bit repetitive and slightly unnatural. Try to avoid redundancy like "any new cases and any" and use more natural phrasing. Also, keep your answer concise and directly to the point with a clear topic sentence.

示例: I am a full-time employee working as a junior associate in a law chamber, where I assist senior advocates by drafting new cases.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid incomplete thoughts. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I work as a junior associate in a law chamber located in Hakka City, where I assist senior advocates with tasks such as case drafting.

建议: Your answer is positive and descriptive but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas clearly. Also, avoid sentence fragments.

示例: Certainly, it is a comfortable and cozy place to work because it has an attractive ambience, plenty of natural light, fresh air, and good ventilation.

建议: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is a bit repetitive and informal. Try to use more formal and precise vocabulary and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your points.

示例: Absolutely, I really like my workplace because it has a cozy and homely atmosphere, which motivates me to work eagerly every day.

建议: Your answer conveys your plans clearly but has some grammatical errors and could be more concise. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Currently, I am a junior associate, but I plan to continue my studies and take the Bar Council exam to become an advocate, which is my ultimate goal to serve my community.

× Well as I currently working as a junior associate or apprentice lawyer but I want to pursue my further study and take part in Bar Council exam to be an advocate.

✓ Well, as I am currently working as a junior associate or apprentice lawyer, I want to pursue my further study and take part in the Bar Council exam to be an advocate.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' before the present participle 'working'. In English, the present continuous tense requires the verb 'to be' plus the '-ing' form of the main verb. So, 'I currently working' should be 'I am currently working'. Also, adding commas improves clarity.

× I currently work in a law chamber that situated in Hakka City and I work as a junior associate.

✓ I currently work in a law chamber that is situated in Hakka City and I work as a junior associate.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'that' to correctly form the relative clause. 'That situated' is incorrect; it should be 'that is situated' to indicate location properly.

× I have to help my senior advocates to draft any new cases and any.

✓ I have to help my senior advocates draft any new cases and so on.

The phrase 'help someone to do something' is acceptable but often 'help someone do something' is more natural. Also, 'and any' is incomplete and unclear; replacing it with 'and so on' or 'and other related tasks' clarifies the meaning.

× Basically, I work in a law chamber that situated in Hakka City and I work as a junior associate. So I have to work under my senior advocates.

✓ Basically, I work in a law chamber that is situated in Hakka City and I work as a junior associate. So I have to work under my senior advocates.

As before, 'that situated' should be 'that is situated'. The phrase 'work under my senior advocates' is acceptable but could be improved to 'work under the supervision of my senior advocates' for clarity.

× Certainly, it's a very comfortable and cozy place to work since it has a very attractive ambience and it is full of. Light and fresh air and have a good ventilation.

✓ Certainly, it's a very comfortable and cozy place to work since it has a very attractive ambience and it is full of light and fresh air and has good ventilation.

The sentence incorrectly capitalizes 'Light' and uses 'have' instead of 'has' for the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'a good ventilation' should be 'good ventilation' because 'ventilation' is an uncountable noun here and does not need an article.

× Absolutely, I am quite fond of my working place since it gives me a cozy and comfortable vibe and it's like very homely feeling and I am always eager to do my work here so I love it.

✓ Absolutely, I am quite fond of my workplace since it gives me a cozy and comfortable vibe and a very homely feeling, and I am always eager to do my work here, so I love it.

'Working place' is better expressed as 'workplace'. The phrase 'it's like very homely feeling' is awkward; changing it to 'a very homely feeling' improves clarity. Adding commas helps separate ideas for better readability.