工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在错误，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，明确表达身份和状态，避免重复和不完整的句子。

示例: I'm currently a college student in my senior year. Besides studying, I am also doing an internship, so my schedule is quite busy.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，'learn about out'不明确，建议使用准确的词汇表达工作内容，并且句子结构要更连贯。

示例: I work at Shirley Grey, an educational company that helps people learn English. While preparing for my own English test, I am doing an internship there, which I find very interesting.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不连贯，句子不完整且含糊，建议使用完整句子，清晰表达观点，并避免无关内容。

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work. At first, I was unsure, but after the interview, I found the leaders are supportive and treat me well. They teach me how to do my work and build good relationships with coworkers.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但有语法错误和用词不当，如'excellent'前应使用'a'，建议注意冠词使用和句子流畅性。

示例: Yes, I like the place where I work. The job conditions and the atmosphere with my coworkers are excellent. I chose this internship because I am interested in English learning and promotion.

建议: 回答不完整且语法混乱，表达不清楚未来计划，建议简洁明了地说明未来工作计划，避免重复和不完整句子。

示例: During college, I plan to continue working at this company because I enjoy it. In the future, I also want to study more about English education.

× I'm currently a college student and I'm a senior assistant semester, but I'm still I'm studying well, participating in a job and as an intern and I think it's quite busy during the 2.

✓ I'm currently a college student and I'm a senior in my last semester, but I'm still studying well, participating in a job and working as an intern, and I think it's quite busy during this time.

句子中'senior assistant semester'应为'senior in my last semester'，表示“我大四的最后一个学期”。此外，'participating in a job and as an intern'表达不清，应改为'participating in a job and working as an intern'。这里涉及单复数和表达准确性的问题。

× Actually, I work at Shirley Grey. It's an educational company that helps people to learn about out. So while I'm preparing for my out test, I'm still doing internship in this company. So I think it's quite interesting.

✓ Actually, I work at Shirley Grey. It's an educational company that helps people to learn English. So while I'm preparing for my TOEFL test, I'm still doing an internship at this company. So I think it's quite interesting.

'learn about out'表达不正确，应为'learn English'或具体语言名称；'doing internship'缺少冠词，应为'doing an internship'；'in this company'应为'at this company'，因为通常用'at'表示工作地点。

× Yes I do. At first I wasn't sure about this company but after I turned the interview I found my leaders are really good and they treat me very nice. They taught me how to do my work and how to get a good relationship with your coworkers. Besides they I also like the animals.

✓ Yes, I do. At first, I wasn't sure about this company but after I went through the interview, I found my leaders are really good and they treat me very nicely. They taught me how to do my work and how to build a good relationship with my coworkers. Besides, I also like the animals.

'turned the interview'应为'went through the interview'或'had the interview'，这里是过去时态的错误；'treat me very nice'应为'treat me very nicely'，副词用法错误；'how to get a good relationship with your coworkers'中的'get'不太合适，改为'build'更自然；'Besides they I also like the animals'语序错误，应为'Besides, I also like the animals'。

× Yes, I do, whether the job condition or the atmosphere between me and my coworkers, I think it's a excellent place to do my internship. And also the reason I choose this internship is because I'm interested in English learning and how to promote.

✓ Yes, I do. Whether it's the job conditions or the atmosphere between me and my coworkers, I think it's an excellent place to do my internship. Also, the reason I chose this internship is because I'm interested in English learning and how to promote it.

'whether the job condition or the atmosphere'缺少谓语，应补充'it's'；'a excellent'应为'an excellent'，冠词错误；'And also'开头不合适，改为'Also'；'the reason I choose'时态应为过去式'chose'，因为选择已经发生；'how to promote'后应加宾语，如'it'。

× While during my college, I plan to keep working in this company because I really like it and it's about the the I'm really interested in this English learning session. Besides, I would also like to study about in the future, so it would be.

✓ During my college years, I plan to keep working in this company because I really like it and it's about the area I'm really interested in, which is English learning. Besides, I would also like to study more in the future, so it would be beneficial.

'While during my college'表达不自然，应为'During my college years'；'it's about the the I'm really interested in this English learning session'语句不完整且重复，应改为'it's about the area I'm really interested in, which is English learning'；'study about'用法错误，应为'study more'或'study further'；句尾'so it would be'不完整，应补充完整表达。