工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct terms like 'commerce stream' instead of 'commerce train' and make your sentences clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating information unnecessarily.

示例: I recently completed my senior secondary education in the commerce stream, and now I am planning to pursue further studies.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has pronunciation and vocabulary errors, such as 'eyelids exam' instead of 'IELTS exam'. Also, avoid repeating 'I am a student' since you already mentioned it. Try to be more precise and natural in your response.

示例: I am currently not working as I am a student preparing for the IELTS exam to pursue higher studies abroad.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'The place where I study has a beautiful environment with lots of greenery, and the staff are very supportive and brilliant.'

示例: The place where I study is excellent because it has a beautiful environment with plenty of greenery, and the staff members are very supportive and knowledgeable.

建议: Your answer repeats previous points and has grammatical errors like 'nature of all the Staffs'. Try to use linking words and more natural expressions. For example, 'Yes, I like the place where I study because of its beautiful surroundings and the positive attitude of the staff.'

示例: Yes, I like the place where I study because it has beautiful surroundings, and all the staff members have a very positive attitude.

建议: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and contains errors like 'commerce frame'. Try to structure your answer clearly with linking words and avoid repeating the same idea. For example, 'After completing my senior secondary education in the commerce stream, I plan to pursue higher studies abroad. I am currently preparing for the IELTS exam to achieve this goal and become independent.'

示例: After completing my senior secondary education in the commerce stream, I plan to pursue higher studies abroad. Therefore, I am preparing for the IELTS exam to achieve this goal and become independent.

× Well, recently I completed my senior secondary education from the commerce train and now I am looking for further studies.

✓ Well, recently I completed my senior secondary education from the commerce stream and now I am looking for further studies.

The word 'train' is incorrect in this context; the correct term is 'stream' when referring to a field of study. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar tense issue, but since it affects the meaning, correction is necessary.

× As I mentioned earlier, I do not work yet.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I do not work yet.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct. 'Do not work yet' correctly expresses the current state.

× I am a student and now I am preparing for eyelids exam because I want to go abroad for my higher studies.

✓ I am a student and now I am preparing for the IELTS exam because I want to go abroad for my higher studies.

The term 'eyelids exam' is incorrect; the correct term is 'IELTS exam'. Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'IELTS exam' because it refers to a specific exam.

× Well, where I am studying now it is a very good place and their environment is also very beautiful and there is everywhere greenery and the staff of their center are most of brilliant.

✓ Well, where I am studying now is a very good place and its environment is also very beautiful; there is greenery everywhere and most of the staff at the center are brilliant.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used to refer to the place; 'its' is correct for singular nouns like 'place'. Also, 'there is everywhere greenery' is awkward; 'there is greenery everywhere' is correct. 'Most of brilliant' is incomplete; 'most of the staff are brilliant' is correct.

× Yes, I like the place where I work as I mentioned earlier that their surroundings are very beautiful and nature of all the Staffs are so positive and I like this place very much.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work as I mentioned earlier; its surroundings are very beautiful and the nature of all the staff is very positive. I like this place very much.

'Their' should be 'its' to refer to the place. 'Staffs' is incorrect; 'staff' is a collective noun and does not take a plural form. Also, 'nature of all the Staffs are' should be 'nature of all the staff is' to agree in number.

× I completed my senior secondary education from commerce frame and I am now looking for further education and I'm also preparing for my exam because I want to go abroad for my higher studies because I want to be independent.

✓ I completed my senior secondary education from the commerce stream and I am now looking for further education. I'm also preparing for my exam because I want to go abroad for my higher studies and become independent.

'Commerce frame' is incorrect; it should be 'commerce stream'. The sentence is long and can be split for clarity. Also, 'because I want to be independent' is better expressed as 'and become independent' to avoid repetition and improve flow.