工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains errors in word choice and grammar. Try to use correct job titles and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'too' when you already mentioned studying.

示例: I work part-time as a barista at a cafe near my hometown while also studying for my bachelor's degree.

建议: There is confusion in your job title; 'barrister' means a lawyer, but you probably mean 'barista'. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'a different kinds'. Use singular or plural correctly and be more specific about your tasks.

示例: I work as a barista at a cafe near my hometown. My job involves preparing various types of coffee and creating latte art.

建议: Your answer is positive but has grammatical errors and filler words like 'uh'. Try to use correct plural forms and avoid fillers. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: Definitely yes, because the owner and the cafe staff are very friendly and helpful. We support each other with any problems, and the atmosphere in the cafe is very pleasant.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes such as subject-verb agreement. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

示例: Of course, I like the place where I work because it provides a good salary and supports my studies financially. Moreover, the friendly people and pleasant atmosphere make it enjoyable.

建议: There is confusion in job titles again, and the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect. Use correct titles and complete your thoughts clearly without trailing off.

示例: Currently, I am working as a junior barista, but my future plan is to become a head barista and earn a higher income.

× I work part time as a body star over my nearby hometown cafe while also studying for my bachelor's degree too.

✓ I work part time as a barista at a nearby cafe in my hometown while also studying for my bachelor's degree.

The word 'body star' is incorrect; the correct term is 'barista'. Also, 'nearby hometown cafe' is awkward; it should be 'a nearby cafe in my hometown'. The plural form 'bachelor's degree' is correct as it is a singular degree.

× I work as a barrister at a cafe near my hometown. My job involves developing a different kinds of coffee and latte arts. Yeah.

✓ I work as a barista at a cafe near my hometown. My job involves developing different kinds of coffee and latte art.

The word 'barrister' is incorrect; it should be 'barista'. 'A different kinds' is incorrect because 'kinds' is plural and 'a' is singular; it should be 'different kinds'. 'Latte arts' should be 'latte art' as 'art' is uncountable here.

× Definitely yes, because the owner and the cafe Staffs uh who oaks there are very friendly and of helping nature.

✓ Definitely yes, because the owner and the cafe staff who work there are very friendly and helpful.

'Staffs' is incorrect; 'staff' is a collective noun and does not take an 's'. 'Oaks' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'work'. 'Of helping nature' is awkward; 'helpful' is the correct adjective.

× We support my studies financially and the people who works here and the owner and the atmosphere makes it a very pleasant place to work.

✓ They support my studies financially, and the people who work here, the owner, and the atmosphere make it a very pleasant place to work.

'We support my studies' is incorrect if referring to others; it should be 'They support my studies'. 'People who works' is incorrect; 'people' is plural so the verb should be 'work'. 'Makes' should be 'make' because the subject is plural ('people', 'owner', and 'atmosphere').

× Till the date I am working as a junior barrister but my future work plan is to be a head barista and earns a lot of.

✓ Till now, I am working as a junior barista, but my future work plan is to be a head barista and earn a lot.

'Till the date' is awkward; 'Till now' or 'Until now' is better. 'Barrister' is incorrect; it should be 'barista'. 'Earns' is incorrect because the subject is 'I' and after 'to' the verb should be in base form 'earn'. The sentence is incomplete; 'a lot of' should be followed by a noun or omitted.