工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to answer the question directly and avoid redundancy. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'I am very agree' to 'I really enjoy'. Keep your answer concise and natural.

示例: I work as a software developer and system engineer. I've been in this role for three years at the same company, and I really enjoy my job.

建议: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by structuring it properly. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary errors such as 'multinationality' to 'multinational'.

示例: I work as a contractor for a multinational company that serves a National Bank. I am happy because this job allows me to improve both my hard and soft skills, so I enjoy my workdays.

建议: Provide more specific reasons and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'a issue' to 'an issue' and 'enjoyable, enjoyable' to 'an enjoyable'.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because my days are calm, and I have helpful colleagues who assist me with daily tasks and issues. Overall, it's an enjoyable environment to work in.

建议: Make your answer more fluent and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, correct grammar such as 'complete my issues' to 'complete my tasks'.

示例: Yes, I like my workplace because I can work remotely. During the week, I attend meetings in the morning and spend the afternoon completing my tasks. After work, I usually do some exercise.

建议: Answer more clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar mistakes such as 'wanna' to 'want to'. Also, be specific about your plans.

示例: My future plan is to pass the IELTS exam because it is required for my immigration to Australia next year. I want to find a job in software technology there and improve all my skills to seize better opportunities.

× I am very agree with my job.

✓ I very much agree with my job.

The phrase 'very agree' is incorrect because 'agree' is a verb and cannot be modified directly by 'very'. Instead, use 'very much' to modify the verb 'agree'. This improves the sentence's grammatical correctness and clarity.

× Where they work for a National Bank and for I am a contractor for a multinationality company.

✓ I work for a National Bank and I am a contractor for a multinational company.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and pronoun usage. 'Where they work' is misplaced and confusing. The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb order and corrects 'multinationality' to 'multinational', which is the correct adjective form.

× So I am I am so happy because I could improve my skills, my hard skills and soft skills.

✓ So I am very happy because I can improve my skills, both hard skills and soft skills.

The phrase 'I am I am so happy' is repetitive and 'could' is incorrect here; 'can' expresses present ability. Also, specifying 'both hard skills and soft skills' clarifies the meaning.

× So I enjoy my my day in the work and it allows me.

✓ So I enjoy my day at work and it allows me to grow.

The phrase 'my my day' is repetitive and 'in the work' is incorrect preposition usage; 'at work' is correct. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'to grow' completes the thought logically.

× Yes, because my days are very very quiet and I have a good works made that help me with my daily tasks or when I have a issue and I try to do the same.

✓ Yes, because my days are very quiet and I have good workmates who help me with my daily tasks or when I have an issue, and I try to do the same.

'Very very' is redundant; one 'very' suffices. 'Good works made' is incorrect; it should be 'good workmates' (colleagues). 'A issue' should be 'an issue' due to vowel sound. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× So it's a enjoyable, enjoyable place to work and and enjoy work with them.

✓ So it's an enjoyable place to work and I enjoy working with them.

'A enjoyable' is incorrect because 'enjoyable' starts with a vowel sound; it should be 'an enjoyable'. Repetition of 'enjoyable' and 'and and' is removed. 'Enjoy work with them' is corrected to 'enjoy working with them' for grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I would because I have the possibility to work remotely.

✓ Yes, I would like to because I have the possibility to work remotely.

The original sentence lacks clarity; adding 'like to' clarifies the intention to express willingness or preference.

× So during the week I work from home, I spend my time in some meetings and in the afternoon I try to complete my issues and resolve my.

✓ So during the week I work from home, I spend my time in some meetings and in the afternoon I try to complete my tasks and resolve my issues.

The phrase 'complete my issues' is incorrect; 'issues' are problems to be resolved, not tasks to be completed. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'tasks' and completing 'resolve my issues' improves clarity and correctness.

× My plan is passing the IELTS exam because it's a requirement to immigrate to Australia next year and I get a job in my field of application of software technology.

✓ My plan is to pass the IELTS exam because it's a requirement to immigrate to Australia next year and to get a job in my field of software application technology.

The phrase 'My plan is passing' is incorrect; it should be 'My plan is to pass'. 'Field of application of software technology' is awkward; 'field of software application technology' is clearer. The sentence structure is improved for fluency.

× So I wanna improve all my skills because I feel that it's a good opportunity to get a better job in a.

✓ So I want to improve all my skills because I feel that it's a good opportunity to get a better job.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'in a.' which is incomplete and incorrect. 'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is more appropriate. The corrected sentence is complete and grammatically correct.