工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınız doğal ancak "walk in the airlines" ifadesi yanlış kullanılmış. Doğru ifade "work in the airlines" olmalı. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı ve etkili yapmak için daha net ve kısa cümleler kullanmalısınız.

示例: I am a student, but during the summer, I usually work as a translator for an airline.

建议: Burada da "walk in airlines" ifadesi yanlış kullanılmış. Ayrıca, cümleniz kısa ve açıklayıcı değil. Daha spesifik ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

示例: I work for an airline as a translator, which helps me gain experience for my future career.

建议: Cümleniz biraz tekrarlı ve akıcılığı düşük. Daha doğal ve etkili olmak için cümlelerinizi sadeleştirin ve bağlaçlar kullanarak mantıklı bir akış oluşturun.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it provides valuable experience in translation, which supports my career goals.

建议: Cümlenizde anlam bozuklukları ve yanlış kelime kullanımları var (örneğin "play" yerine "place"). Ayrıca, cümleleriniz çok uzun ve karışık. Daha açık ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

示例: Yes, I really like my workplace because it offers comfortable facilities, good food, and the chance to meet many different people, including tourists and locals.

建议: Cümleniz çok tekrarlı ve anlamı net değil. Daha açık, kısa ve doğru cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, "in the Australia Australia" ifadesi yanlıştır, sadece "in Australia" denmelidir.

示例: My future plan is to live in Australia and work as a freelance translator. I am passionate about making my dreams come true.

× I usually walk in the airlines as a translator.

✓ I usually work in the airlines as a translator.

The verb 'walk' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'work' to describe employment. 'Walk' is a present participle form but does not fit the context of employment.

× I usually walk in airlines to be a translator.

✓ I usually work for airlines as a translator.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to working for a company or organization; 'for' is the correct preposition to indicate employment.

× It helps to my future dream.

✓ It helps my future dream.

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary after 'helps'; the verb 'help' is directly followed by the object without 'to'.

× Actually, it's very good opportunities for me.

✓ Actually, they are very good opportunities for me.

The subject 'it' is singular but refers to plural 'opportunities'; thus, the plural pronoun 'they' should be used to agree with the plural noun.

× I love my play, I love the place I work because you can sleep there, you can eat anything you want and third of all, you can see everybody through tourist, local people and. CEO and hostage.

✓ I love my place, I love the place I work because you can sleep there, you can eat anything you want and thirdly, you can see everybody including tourists, local people, the CEO, and hostages.

The word 'play' is a typo for 'place'. Also, 'third of all' should be 'thirdly' for correct adverbial sequence. 'Tourist' should be plural 'tourists'. The phrase 'through tourist, local people and. CEO and hostage' is unclear and corrected to 'including tourists, local people, the CEO, and hostages' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× My future plans are living in the Australia Australia as a freelance translator.

✓ My future plans are to live in Australia as a freelance translator.

The phrase 'living in the Australia Australia' is incorrect. 'Australia' does not require 'the' and the verb form should be 'to live' to express future plans.

× I love the I love my dreams and I want to be my I want to make real my I want to make dreams come true and I love my dreams.

✓ I love my dreams and I want to make them come true.

The original sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical. Simplifying to 'I love my dreams and I want to make them come true' corrects the sentence structure and conveys the intended meaning clearly.