工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は内容が豊富ですが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「contact several interviews」や「some write articles」は不自然です。より自然な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることを意識しましょう。

示例: I work as a journalist for a Japanese news agency, mainly covering science and technology developments. I often conduct interviews and write articles, which I find exciting because I get to learn about cutting-edge innovations.

建议: 回答に文法ミスや不明瞭な表現が多いです。例えば、「1 the most prestigious mutual」や「companies located on central Tokyo」は意味が伝わりにくいです。正確な情報を簡潔に述べ、文法を正しく使う練習をしましょう。

示例: I currently work at Mickey Simba, one of the most prestigious companies in central Tokyo. I commute there by train, and it takes only a few minutes from my home.

建议: 回答は内容が良いですが、文法や語順の誤りが目立ちます。例えば、「many numbers of people」や「by surrounded by very good people」は不自然です。より自然な表現と正しい文法を使うことを心がけましょう。

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because many colleagues have specialized knowledge in areas like foreign affairs, economics, and new technologies. Being surrounded by such experts helps me learn a lot.

建议: 回答の意味が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。特に「there are not so good news agencies」や「AI, which can good Japanese frequent」は意味が通じません。質問に対して明確で簡潔な答えを心がけ、正しい語彙を使いましょう。

示例: Yes, I like my workplace because it is one of the best news agencies in Japan. However, we face challenges like adapting to AI technology in journalism.

建议: 回答に多くのためらいや繰り返しがあり、流暢さが欠けています。また、「there are not many exciting and stimulating profession」という表現は文法的に誤りです。自信を持って簡潔に話す練習をしましょう。

示例: I want to continue working as a journalist for as long as possible because it is an exciting profession that allows me to share the latest information about society with people.

× I'm mainly covering the stories about development of the science and technology.

✓ I mainly cover stories about the development of science and technology.

The verb 'cover' should be in the simple present tense to describe habitual actions. Using 'covering' here is incorrect because it implies a continuous action rather than a regular activity.

× I'm mainly covering the stories about development of the science and technology.

✓ I mainly cover stories about the development of science and technology.

The phrase 'development of the science and technology' is incorrect; 'the' should be removed before 'science and technology' because these are general fields, and 'the development' requires the article 'the' to specify the development.

× So I always contact several interviews and some write articles and it's very exciting and stimulating because I can get in touch with cutting edge developments.

✓ So I always conduct several interviews and write some articles, and it's very exciting and stimulating because I can get in touch with cutting-edge developments.

The phrase 'contact several interviews' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'conduct' for interviews. Also, 'some write articles' is incomplete; it should be 'write some articles'. 'Cutting edge' should be hyphenated as 'cutting-edge' when used as an adjective.

× I work at the Mickey Simba now, which is 1 the most prestigious mutual in this city in Japan and companies located on central Tokyo.

✓ I work at Mickey Simba now, which is one of the most prestigious mutual companies in this city in Japan and is located in central Tokyo.

The word 'mutual' is incomplete; it should be 'mutual companies' or 'mutual firms'. Also, 'companies located on central Tokyo' is incorrect; it should be 'located in central Tokyo'. The phrase 'which is 1 the most prestigious' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the most prestigious'.

× companies located on central Tokyo.

✓ companies located in central Tokyo.

The correct preposition for locations within a city is 'in', not 'on'.

× So I have to commute there. It takes several minutes by train. It seems that not so far from my home.

✓ So I have to commute there. It takes several minutes by train. It seems that it is not so far from my home.

The sentence 'It seems that not so far from my home' is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'it is' corrects the sentence structure.

× there are many numbers of people who have a very special knowledge of, for example, about the foreign affairs, the economics and science, where the new technology.

✓ There are many people who have very special knowledge of, for example, foreign affairs, economics, and science, including new technology.

The phrase 'many numbers of people' is incorrect; it should be 'many people'. Also, 'knowledge of, for example, about' is redundant; 'knowledge of' suffices. 'Where the new technology' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'including new technology'.

× It's a very exciting experience for me to get a lot of knowledge by surrounded by very good people.

✓ It's a very exciting experience for me to gain a lot of knowledge by being surrounded by very good people.

The phrase 'by surrounded by' is incorrect; the correct form is 'by being surrounded by' to indicate the means by which the experience occurs.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question 'Would you like the place where you work?' is awkward and incorrect in this context. The correct question to ask about preference is 'Do you like the place where you work?'.

× Yes, I'd like the workplace because there are not so good news agencies not only in Japan but also in the US or European countries.

✓ Yes, I like the workplace because there are not many good news agencies not only in Japan but also in the US and European countries.

The phrase 'I'd like the workplace' is incorrect; 'I like the workplace' is appropriate. 'Not so good news agencies' should be 'not many good news agencies' to express scarcity. Also, 'or European countries' should be 'and European countries'.

× But the most challenging thing that we have to overcome is how to deal with the AI, which can good Japanese frequent.

✓ But the most challenging thing that we have to overcome is how to deal with AI, which can frequently affect Japanese language.

The phrase 'which can good Japanese frequent' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It likely intends to say AI can frequently affect the Japanese language or usage. The sentence needs rephrasing for clarity and correctness.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

This is a question from the examiner and does not require correction.

× Uh, I would like to, umm, be a journalist as long as possible, Yeah, because there are not many exciting and stimulating, uh, profession which uh, makes the people, umm, get in touch with the, uh, latest information about the society.

✓ Uh, I would like to be a journalist as long as possible, yeah, because there are not many exciting and stimulating professions that allow people to get in touch with the latest information about society.

The phrase 'as long as possible' is correct but should be connected smoothly. 'Profession' should be plural 'professions' to match 'many'. 'Which makes the people get in touch' should be 'that allow people to get in touch' for correct relative clause and verb agreement. 'The society' should be 'society' without 'the'.