工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应避免语法错误和不连贯的表达，例如“in the I see June”不清楚且影响理解。建议简洁明了地表达毕业时间和当前状态，避免重复“preparing”。

示例: I graduated from university last June, and now I am staying at home preparing for the IELTS exam and applying for a master's program.

建议: 回答中出现了语法错误，如“did participated”应为“did participate”。建议使用连贯的句子，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: I'm not currently working officially, but I participated in an internship at a law firm last April, where I gained useful experience in legal research and client communication to prepare myself for a career as a lawyer.

建议: 回答不够清晰，存在语法和表达混乱，如“I'm not say I'm not saying it's a good”重复且不完整。建议简洁表达观点，避免含糊和语法错误。

示例: I wouldn't say it's a perfect place, but it was practical and useful for me to learn about the professional environment and work atmosphere, which helped me deepen my understanding of the field.

建议: 回答中有重复词汇和不完整句子，如“the the city atmosphere”及句子未完成。建议完整表达观点，避免重复，使用连接词使句子流畅。

示例: Yes, I interned in Chengdu, which is located in southwest China near my hometown. I really appreciate the city's laid-back lifestyle and atmosphere.

建议: 回答未完成，且表达略显口语化。建议完整表达未来计划，使用正式且连贯的语言。

示例: I plan to intern at a large company like Tencent to gain experience as an in-house counsel, since my previous internship at a law firm showed me that working there is not my preference.

× I graduated from university in the I see June and now I am staying at home preparing for the IELTS exam and preparing for the application for the master program in.

✓ I graduated from university in June and now I am staying at home preparing for the IELTS exam and preparing for the application for the master program.

句中“in the I see June”存在多余和错误的词语，应删除“the I see”使时间表达正确。这里涉及过去时间表达的准确性。

× I did participated in an internship last April at a law firm.

✓ I did participate in an internship last April at a law firm.

“did participated”是错误的过去时用法，助动词“did”后应接动词原形“participate”，而不是过去式“participated”。

× like the legal research client communication.

✓ like legal research and client communication.

“like the legal research client communication”缺少连接词，且“the”使用不当，应改为“like legal research and client communication”以正确连接并表达。

× Actually, I'm not say I'm not saying it's a good, but it's a practical and useful place for me to learn more about physics, you know, professional environment and work atmosphere at there so I can deepen my understanding of my.

✓ Actually, I'm not saying it's a good place, but it's a practical and useful place for me to learn more about the professional environment and work atmosphere there so I can deepen my understanding.

句中“I'm not say”应为“I'm not saying”，且“physics”应为“the professional environment”，另外“at there”应去掉“at”，并且句尾不完整，需补全。

× I interned in Chengdu, which located in the southwest of China and Chengdu is near my hometown and the the city atmosphere is very precious to me.

✓ I interned in Chengdu, which is located in the southwest of China, and Chengdu is near my hometown. The city atmosphere is very precious to me.

“which located”缺少系动词“is”，句子应为“which is located”。另外，句子过长，建议分句表达更清晰。

× You know the laid back lifestyle and the.

✓ You know, the laid-back lifestyle and the relaxed atmosphere.

“laid back”作为形容词应连写为“laid-back”，且句子不完整，需补充完整表达。

× I intend to intern in a big company like Tencent or some Internet company to deepen my understanding of an in house counsel instead of being a lawyer in a law firm.

✓ I intend to intern at a big company like Tencent or some Internet company to deepen my understanding of an in-house counsel role instead of being a lawyer in a law firm.

“intern in a company”应改为“intern at a company”，表示在某公司实习；“in house counsel”应加连字符为“in-house counsel”，且补充“role”使表达完整。

× You know, I interned at a law firm last April, so I know that's not my cup of tea.

✓ You know, I interned at a law firm last April, so I know that wasn't my cup of tea.

前半句是过去时，后半句应保持时态一致，使用过去时“wasn't”更合适。