工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 'I'm a I'm a worker' 대신 'I'm a worker'로 간결하게 말하고, 'studying everywhere'는 모호하므로 구체적으로 어디서 공부하는지 말하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장을 3~4문장 이내로 간결하게 구성하세요.

示例: I'm a worker, but in my free time, I study English at home or online to improve my skills.

建议: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'working around then checking on production of quality' 대신 'I work on the production line and check the quality of the cars'와 같이 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하세요.

示例: I work in a car factory where I check the quality of the cars on the production line.

建议: 답변이 이해하기 어렵고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 'each particle polarized each'는 의미가 불분명하므로 제거하고, 근무 환경과 근무 시간에 대해 명확하게 설명하세요. 예를 들어, 'The work is not too hard, and I have flexible breaks'와 같이 말할 수 있습니다.

示例: Yes, it's a good place to work because the work is not too hard, and I have flexible breaks during the day.

建议: 중복된 표현('I just I just')을 피하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I want to work somewhere else because there is a lot of dust and the air quality is poor'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

示例: I would like to work somewhere else because there is a lot of dust at my current workplace, and the air quality is poor.

建议: 문법 오류('for get' 대신 'to get')를 수정하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예를 들어, 'I am studying English to get a job in Australia, so I plan to study at a university there for a year'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

示例: I am studying English to get a job in Australia, so I plan to attend university there for a year.

× Actually I'm a I'm a worker, but when I have a short time I'm studying everywhere or improving my English skill.

✓ Actually, I'm a worker, but when I have a short time, I study everywhere or improve my English skills.

The use of 'I'm studying' and 'improving' suggests continuous action, but here the speaker refers to habitual actions, so the simple present tense 'I study' and 'improve' is more appropriate. Also, 'English skill' should be plural 'English skills' to refer to language abilities generally.

× I'm working in the car factory. My job is working around then checking on production of quality.

✓ I work in the car factory. My job is to work around and then check on the quality of production.

The present continuous 'I'm working' is less appropriate for a permanent job; simple present 'I work' is better. Also, 'My job is working' is incorrect; it should be 'My job is to work'. The phrase 'checking on production of quality' is awkward; 'check on the quality of production' is correct.

× Yes, each particle polarized each. Not too hard work. Then I can get a lot of short time. That's why when I want, I can get less time when I want.

✓ Yes, each part is polarized. The work is not too hard. Then I can get a lot of free time. That's why when I want, I can take less time off.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect word choices. 'Each particle polarized each' is unclear; likely meant 'each part is polarized'. 'Not too hard work' should be 'The work is not too hard'. 'A lot of short time' is incorrect; 'a lot of free time' is better. 'I can get less time when I want' is unclear; 'I can take less time off when I want' is clearer.

× Actually I just I just want to work other place because our workplace has a lot of dust and I think air quality is very not good.

✓ Actually, I just want to work in another place because our workplace has a lot of dust and I think the air quality is very bad.

'Work other place' is missing a preposition; it should be 'work in another place'. 'Air quality is very not good' is incorrect; 'air quality is very bad' is correct. Also, 'another' is better than 'other' here.

× Nowadays I'm studying English for get a job in Australia, that's why I'm studying a year for going to uni in Australia.

✓ Nowadays, I'm studying English to get a job in Australia; that's why I've been studying for a year to go to university in Australia.

'For get a job' is incorrect; it should be 'to get a job' (infinitive form). 'I'm studying a year for going to uni' is awkward; 'I've been studying for a year to go to university' is better. Also, 'uni' is informal; 'university' is more appropriate in this context.