工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh những thông tin không liên quan hoặc không rõ ràng như 'at 12:47'. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và đầy đủ ý nghĩa.

示例: I am currently a student at Hobart High School. After graduation, I plan to work in the logistics industry.

建议: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết logic giữa các ý. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn.

示例: I am currently a student, so I don't work yet. However, my dream is to work in the logistics industry because I find it very interesting and it offers many opportunities for growth. If I get a chance, I would like to work at a port or a shipping company.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi sai. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, of course. It is a great place to work because it offers excellent opportunities for professional development. The country has a strong economy and good education system, which helps me improve my skills and knowledge.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản và tránh lặp từ. Hãy làm rõ ý tưởng và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I am still a student, but if I had the chance to work in the logistics industry, I think it would be a comfortable place that supports my productivity and motivation.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic. Hãy trình bày kế hoạch tương lai một cách cụ thể và mạch lạc.

示例: In the future, I want to work in logistics because it combines creativity with data analysis, which I find very appealing. I plan to gain experience through online courses to build a strong foundation. I also hope to work for a company where I can apply my skills.

× Actually it's almost now.

✓ Actually, it's almost time now.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'time' clarifies the meaning and fits the present tense context.

× I'm a student at 12:47 at Hobart High School and after graduation I I will show in the logistics in Shawnee.

✓ I'm a student at Hobart High School, and after graduation, I will work in logistics in Shawnee.

The original sentence has a time '12:47' misplaced and the phrase 'I will show in the logistics' is incorrect. Correcting the sentence structure and verb usage improves clarity.

× Ashley's I'm I'm currently a student so don't work yet.

✓ Actually, I'm currently a student, so I don't work yet.

The original sentence has unclear wording and missing subject 'I' before 'don't work'. Correcting the sentence structure and adding the subject improves grammar.

× it's offer many opportunity for broad.

✓ it offers many opportunities abroad.

The verb 'offer' should be in third person singular 'offers'. 'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities'. 'Broad' is incorrect; the correct word is 'abroad'.

× If I get a chance I would like to work a port or sleeping company.

✓ If I get a chance, I would like to work at a port or shipping company.

The preposition 'at' is needed before 'a port'. 'Sleeping company' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'shipping company'.

× because it's offered excellent opportunity for professional development.

✓ because it offers excellent opportunities for professional development.

The verb 'offered' is past participle; present tense 'offers' fits better here. Also, 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities'.

× The country's had a strong economy and provide a good education stadium but help me improve my skill and knowledge.

✓ The country has a strong economy and provides a good education system that helps me improve my skills and knowledge.

'Had' should be 'has' for present tense. 'Provide' should be 'provides' to agree with singular subject. 'Stadium' is incorrect; 'system' is correct. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills'.

× Uh, now I'm a student yet and if I had, I had the chance to work in Chamonix at, at the, in uh, in the logistic industries, I think it's a comfortable and will keep work play can significantly support my productivity and motivation.

✓ Uh, now I'm still a student, and if I had the chance to work in Chamonix in the logistics industry, I think it would be comfortable and would significantly support my productivity and motivation.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correcting verb tenses and sentence structure improves clarity and grammar.

× I belong to you, which shows a curious in the logistic because it's campaign creativity with with data analysis.

✓ I belong to you, which shows a curiosity in logistics because it combines creativity with data analysis.

'Curious' should be 'curiosity'. 'Logistic' should be 'logistics'. 'Campaign' is incorrect; 'combines' fits the context.

× I am to get my experience through online courts to be a strong foundation.

✓ I am trying to gain experience through online courses to build a strong foundation.

'Courts' is incorrect; 'courses' is correct. 'Get my experience' is better expressed as 'gain experience'.

× I have to work an additional company where I can.

✓ I want to work at an additional company where I can.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Have to' implies obligation, but context suggests desire, so 'want to' is better. 'Work an additional company' should be 'work at an additional company'.