工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“food study”应为“further study”，时态使用不准确。建议使用更准确的时态和词汇，避免语法错误，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: I graduated from Jillian University last year and have been preparing for a postgraduate program in the United Kingdom. Therefore, I didn't work during that time because I wanted to focus on further studies, which also helped me improve my English skills.

建议: 回答重复且表达不清晰，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并用连贯的句子表达观点。

示例: I am currently not working because I am focusing on my studies in my hometown. Studying in the library helps me improve my English and prepare for my MA major in economics and science.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，如“it's be quiet”应为“it is quiet”。建议使用正确的语法和更自然的表达，同时避免重复。

示例: Although I don't work, I study in the library, which is a great place because it offers free Wi-Fi and a quiet environment, allowing me to concentrate on my studies.

建议: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，句子结构不完整。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达喜欢图书馆的原因，并避免语法错误。

示例: Yes, I like the library because it provides free Wi-Fi and a quiet environment without interruptions, which helps me focus on my studies and gain more knowledge.

建议: 回答较好，但有语法错误，如“a close relative to”应为“closely related to”，表达更准确。建议注意词汇搭配和语法准确性。

示例: After I finish my master's degree, I plan to return to China and find a good job in the banking or trading sectors. These jobs are closely related to my major in finance and economics, and I believe I can apply the knowledge and skills I have gained during my studies.

× Last year I graduated from the Jillian University and I prepared for the postgraduate program in the United Kingdom.

✓ Last year I graduated from Jillian University and prepared for the postgraduate program in the United Kingdom.

这里的“the Jillian University”中“the”不需要，因为大学名称前通常不加冠词。动词“prepared”前的主语“I”可以省略以避免重复。

× So I didn't work at that time because I want to focus on the food study and that can help me to improve some English skills.

✓ So I didn't work at that time because I wanted to focus on my food studies and that could help me improve some English skills.

句子描述过去的情况，动词时态应使用过去式。“want”应改为“wanted”，“can”应改为“could”。“food study”应改为复数形式“food studies”，表示学习的科目。

× Uh, as I mentioned, I didn't work at the time because I just studied in the library and I live in my hometown.

✓ Uh, as I mentioned, I didn't work at that time because I just studied in the library and lived in my hometown.

描述过去的情况，动词“live”应使用过去式“lived”。

× I think focus on study can help me to, uh, improve some English skills and the further studies about MA major such as the economics and science.

✓ I think focusing on studying can help me improve some English skills and further studies in MA majors such as economics and science.

“focus on study”应改为动名词形式“focusing on studying”。“the further studies about MA major”表达不自然，应改为“further studies in MA majors”。“the economics and science”中“the”不需要，且应为复数形式。

× As I mentioned, I didn't work and inside of this I studied in the library.

✓ As I mentioned, I didn't work and during this time I studied in the library.

“inside of this”用法不当，应改为“during this time”表示时间段。

× I think it's a very good place to study because it provides a free Wi-Fi and I can pay attention to studying in that place because it's be quiet and I have to focus on study.

✓ I think it's a very good place to study because it provides free Wi-Fi and I can concentrate on studying there because it's quiet and I have to focus on my studies.

“a free Wi-Fi”中Wi-Fi不可数，不用冠词。“pay attention to studying”表达不自然，改为“concentrate on studying”。“it's be quiet”语法错误，应为“it's quiet”。“focus on study”应为“focus on my studies”。

× Yes, I like library because I can study in there with the free Wi-Fi and the quiet environment without some interruption and I can focus on what I study.

✓ Yes, I like the library because I can study there with free Wi-Fi and a quiet environment without interruptions, and I can focus on what I study.

“like library”应加定冠词“the library”。“study in there”应为“study there”。“the free Wi-Fi”中Wi-Fi不可数，不用冠词。“without some interruption”应为“without interruptions”。

× I can learn some fuller knowledge and I can become.

✓ I can learn more comprehensive knowledge and improve myself.

“some fuller knowledge”表达不正确，应为“more comprehensive knowledge”。“I can become”句子不完整，需补充内容。

× After I finished my master's degree, I plan to return to China and to find a good job in the banking or the trading sectors.

✓ After I finish my master's degree, I plan to return to China and find a good job in the banking or trading sectors.

“After I finished”应为将来时“After I finish”，因为后面是计划。动词“to find”中“to”可省略。

× These jobs are a close relative to my major in finance and economics and I believe I can play the knowledge and skills I have gained during my studies.

✓ These jobs are closely related to my major in finance and economics, and I believe I can apply the knowledge and skills I have gained during my studies.

“a close relative to”用法错误，应为“closely related to”。“play the knowledge”表达错误，应为“apply the knowledge”。