工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases such as "to UN little amount of money." Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

示例: I am a student, but I also work part-time to earn a small amount of money to cover my expenses.

建议: Your answer provides relevant information but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing like "fuel station" and "filling up the stocks dear." Use correct verb tenses and clearer vocabulary. Also, try to link your ideas for better coherence.

示例: I work as a customer attendant at a fuel station in my suburb called Toongabbie. My duties include serving customers and restocking items.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains unclear phrases such as "working woman there." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons.

示例: Definitely, it is a great place to work because of the friendly staff and the chance to interact with people from various cultures.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and better structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary.

示例: Yes, I have been working at the fuel station for two years, so it feels familiar. I enjoy my job and always make sure to keep the place clean and well-maintained.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors such as "go for my role as a social work." Use correct expressions and linking words to make your answer more natural and coherent.

示例: Currently, I am studying social work, and my future plans are to work in this field. After I finish my studies, I hope to start my career as a social worker.

× I am a student but I also work part time to UN little amount of money for my expenses.

✓ I am a student but I also work part time to earn a little amount of money for my expenses.

The phrase 'to UN little amount' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'to earn a little amount' where 'earn' is the appropriate verb and 'a little amount' is the correct quantifier for money. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× My task involved serving the customers and filling up the stocks dear.

✓ My tasks involve serving the customers and filling up the stock there.

The original sentence has 'task' singular but refers to multiple activities, so 'tasks' plural is appropriate. Also, 'stocks dear' is incorrect; it should be 'stock there' meaning the inventory at the location. This correction aligns subject and verb agreement and corrects vocabulary usage.

× Definitely it is a very good place to work because of the working woman there and the opportunity to interact with different people from different cultures.

✓ Definitely, it is a very good place to work because of the hardworking women there and the opportunity to interact with different people from different cultures.

The phrase 'working woman' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'hardworking women' to describe diligent female workers. Also, 'woman' should be plural 'women' to match the context. This correction improves adjective use and noun number agreement.

× Yes, it's been two years. I'm working at that fuel station and the place looks very familiar to me.

✓ Yes, it's been two years. I've been working at that fuel station and the place looks very familiar to me.

The phrase 'I'm working' suggests a current action, but the context implies a duration over two years, so present perfect continuous 'I've been working' is more appropriate to express ongoing action over time.

× I always try to maintain and clean the things over there.

✓ I always try to maintain and clean things there.

The phrase 'clean the things over there' is awkward; 'clean things there' is more natural. Also, 'over there' is unnecessary when 'there' suffices. This correction improves preposition and article usage for natural expression.

× Currently I'm studying social work and my future plans involve working in the same field.

✓ Currently, I'm studying social work and my future plans involve working in the same field.

A comma after 'Currently' improves sentence flow. No article error here; sentence is correct.

× So after finishing my study, I will go for my role as a social work in future.

✓ So after finishing my studies, I will take on my role as a social worker in the future.

'Study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to academic work in general. 'Go for my role' is awkward; 'take on my role' is better. 'Social work' is a field, 'social worker' is a person. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future' for correct article usage.