工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Start with a direct response, then add specific details about your job. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases like "from a tree years before."

示例: I have been working for three years as a quality assurance specialist at a pharmaceutical company that manufactures supplements.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about your role and the company.

示例: I work at a pharmaceutical company that produces supplements. It is part of a large holding company that dominates the market for drugs, medicine, and supplements. My role there is in quality assurance.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like "Very promoters and dumb." Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Be specific about what you like and dislike.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work. I enjoy my colleagues because they are supportive. However, the company is not well located, so commuting is difficult for me. Despite that, I appreciate the opportunities for promotion.

建议: Your answer has contradictory statements and unclear expressions. Start with a clear opinion, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague or negative comments without explanation.

示例: Yes, I like working at this company because it offers opportunities for growth, promotions, and bonuses. However, some of my colleagues are not very friendly and sometimes show jealousy, which can be challenging.

建议: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear topic sentence about your future plans, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid confusing phrases.

示例: In the future, I plan to continue working in quality assurance. However, I would also like to get involved in the business development department, especially in research, where I can enjoy exploring new products online.

× Currently I work from a tree years before and I'm I am at quality assurance in a pharmaceutical company which manufactured supplements.

✓ I have been working for three years and I am in quality assurance at a pharmaceutical company that manufactures supplements.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'work from a tree years before' which is ungrammatical and mixes tenses. The correct form to express duration up to now is present perfect continuous ('have been working for three years'). Also, 'manufactured' should be present tense 'manufactures' to describe the company's ongoing activity.

× I work in a pharmaceutical company which produce supplements, especially in the.

✓ I work in a pharmaceutical company which produces supplements, especially in the...

The verb 'produce' should be 'produces' to agree with the singular subject 'company'. The sentence is incomplete but the correction focuses on subject-verb agreement.

× It belongs to a giant holding that contains the the market of drugs and medicine and supplements.

✓ It belongs to a giant holding that dominates the market of drugs, medicine, and supplements.

The phrase 'contains the the market' is incorrect. 'Contains' is not the right verb here; 'dominates' or 'controls' fits better. Also, the repeated 'the' is an error. The definite article 'the' is correctly used before 'market'.

× Also my occupations as a quality assurance.

✓ Also, my occupation is in quality assurance.

The original sentence lacks a verb and proper structure. Adding 'is in' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I really enjoy my workplace and also my colleagues at there.

✓ I really enjoy my workplace and also my colleagues there.

The preposition 'at' is unnecessary before 'there'. 'There' already indicates location, so 'at there' is incorrect.

× Very promoters and dumb.

✓ They are very supportive and friendly.

The original phrase is unclear and uses incorrect words. 'Promoters' and 'dumb' do not fit the context. Likely intended meaning is positive, so 'supportive and friendly' is appropriate.

× And the look in my company is not well located at commuting is difficult for me, but I also love the the ability for promotions an.

✓ My company is not well located, so commuting is difficult for me, but I also appreciate the opportunities for promotions.

The phrase 'the look in my company' is unclear; likely meant 'location'. 'Located at commuting' is incorrect; 'commuting is difficult' is better. 'Ability for promotions' should be 'opportunities for promotions'. Also, 'the the' is a repeated article error.

× Sure, I really enjoy working in this company because they really give me the portunity to grow and get promotions and bonus.

✓ Sure, I really enjoy working in this company because it really gives me the opportunity to grow and get promotions and bonuses.

The company is singular, so 'they' should be 'it'. 'Portunity' is a typo for 'opportunity'. 'Bonus' should be plural 'bonuses' to match 'promotions'.

× Also my friend, my colleagues are not very good, they are not friendly and that they just a little with jealousy.

✓ Also, my colleagues are not very good; they are not friendly and are a little jealous.

'My friend' is misplaced and likely meant 'my colleagues'. The phrase 'just a little with jealousy' is incorrect; 'are a little jealous' is correct.

× I really plan to maintain my occupation as a quality assurance, but a man involved in the business development department the research part where could where I could really enjoy a researching an exploring the web for new products.

✓ I really plan to maintain my occupation in quality assurance, but I want to be involved in the business development department, particularly the research part, where I could really enjoy researching and exploring the web for new products.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper connectors. 'A man involved' is incorrect; 'I want to be involved' is correct. 'A researching an exploring' should be 'researching and exploring'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.