工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。例えば、"I'm a senior student studying commerce, majoring in entrepreneurship because I want to be an entrepreneur."のように言い換えられます。

示例: I'm a senior student at university, majoring in entrepreneurship because I want to become an entrepreneur.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、発音の誤りや文法の間違いが多く、意味が不明瞭です。正しい動詞や単語を使い、簡潔で明確な文を作ることが重要です。例えば、"I work at Acustica as a wine bar staff. My main responsibility is serving wine to guests."のように表現できます。

示例: I work at Acustica as a wine bar staff. My main responsibility is serving wine to guests, and I enjoy doing it.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より自然な表現を使い、理由を明確に述べることが必要です。例えば、"Yes, Dark Ahsoka is a good place to work because the guests are friendly, so I feel confident interacting with them."のように言い換えられます。

示例: Yes, Dark Ahsoka is a good place to work because the guests are friendly, which makes me confident when interacting with them.

建议: 回答は質問の意図を十分に満たしていません。文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。質問に直接答え、理由を明確に述べることが重要です。例えば、"I would like to work in Ginza because there are many luxury shops, and I want to interact with customers there."のように表現できます。

示例: I would like to work in Ginza because there are many luxury shops, and I want to interact with customers there.

建议: 回答は非常に不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多すぎて意味が伝わりません。将来の計画を明確に述べ、簡潔で正しい英語を使うことが必要です。例えば、"My future plan is to continue studying and get a job, and eventually start my own company."のように言い換えられます。

示例: My future plan is to continue studying, find a job, and eventually start my own company.

× I'm a studying commerce.

✓ I'm studying commerce.

The verb 'studying' should not be preceded by the article 'a'. The correct form is the present continuous tense 'I'm studying' without 'a'.

× I'm a measured in. Entrepreneurship because I want to be a entrepreneur, so.

✓ I'm majoring in Entrepreneurship because I want to be an entrepreneur.

The phrase 'I'm a measured in' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I'm majoring in'. Also, 'a entrepreneur' should be 'an entrepreneur' because 'entrepreneur' starts with a vowel sound.

× I woke. At Acustica as a wine bar stuff.

✓ I work at Acustica as a wine bar staff.

The verb 'woke' is the past tense of 'wake' and is incorrect here. The present tense 'work' should be used to match the context. Also, 'stuff' should be 'staff'.

× My main responsibility is, said a wine for guests.

✓ My main responsibility is serving wine to guests.

The phrase 'said a wine' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'serving' and the preposition 'to' is used with 'guests'.

× Yes, Dark Ahsoka is very good to place to work because the. Guests. Who are visited is very push so.

✓ Yes, Dark Ahsoka is a very good place to work because the guests who visit are very polite.

The phrase 'good to place' should be 'good place'. 'Who are visited' is incorrect; it should be 'who visit'. 'Is very push' is incorrect; likely intended 'are very polite' or similar.

× It is very confident to interact.

✓ I am very confident interacting with them.

'It is very confident' is incorrect because 'it' cannot be confident. The speaker should use 'I am confident'.

× I want to walk at the Ginza be 'cause there's a lot of luck Charlie shops so I want to work at the actually shop to interact with the guests.

✓ I want to work in Ginza because there are a lot of luxury shops, so I want to work at an actual shop to interact with guests.

'Walk at the Ginza' should be 'work in Ginza'. 'Luck Charlie shops' is likely 'luxury shops'. 'Actually shop' should be 'an actual shop'.

× My future plan of job. Is. Call going to upload 2. Study and. The hired there. So I want to have. Company on my own.

✓ My future job plan is to go to university to study and get hired there. I want to have my own company.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It should be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.