Party— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and explains why you like parties, but it is a bit long and repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and avoid repeating the same ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like parties because they help me relax and refresh my mind. Due to my hectic schedule, I often find it hard to concentrate on work, so attending parties allows me to spend quality time with friends and feel more energetic.

Gợi ý: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, which affect clarity. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to structure your sentences better. Also, be specific and clear about the frequency and occasions of parties you attended as a child.

Ví dụ: When I was a kid, I had many restrictions and not many friends, so I attended parties only two or three times a year, mainly on my birthday and other special occasions.

Gợi ý: Your answer conveys the main idea but contains unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to use correct tenses and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating the same time phrase 'at that moment' multiple times. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, about five years ago, I organized a surprise birthday party for my sister, who lives far from home. My family and I were very excited, and she felt over the moon when we surprised her.

× Yes, I like parties because with the help of parties I can easily refresh my mood because nowadays due to hectic schedule I'm not able to properly concentrate on my work and spend time with my friends.

✓ Yes, I like parties because through parties I can easily refresh my mood as nowadays, due to a hectic schedule, I'm not able to properly concentrate on my work and spend time with my friends.

The phrase 'with the help of parties' is not the best prepositional choice here. 'Through parties' better expresses the means by which the mood is refreshed. Also, 'due to hectic schedule' needs an article 'a' before 'hectic schedule' to be grammatically correct.

× So with the help of parties and outing I can easily spend time with my friends as well as as a result I feel more energetic and more focused.

✓ So with the help of parties and outings, I can easily spend time with my friends, and as a result, I feel more energetic and more focused.

The phrase 'as well as as a result' is redundant and incorrect. Using 'and as a result' is appropriate to connect the ideas. Also, 'outing' should be plural 'outings' to match the context.

× Well, when I was a kid, there are a lot of restrictions on me as well as I did not have too much friends at that moment.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, there were a lot of restrictions on me, and I did not have many friends at that time.

The tense of 'there are' should be past 'there were' to match 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'too much friends' is incorrect; 'many friends' is correct for countable nouns. 'At that moment' is better expressed as 'at that time' in this context.

× Moreover, uh, uh, I just go for a part, it's like twice a year or three times in a year when I have my birthday as well and when I had my kitten against the birthday.

✓ Moreover, I just went to parties about twice or three times a year, on my birthday and when I had my kitten's birthday party.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past context. 'Part' should be 'party' or 'parties'. The phrase 'kitten against the birthday' is unclear and likely a mishearing; assuming it means 'kitten's birthday party'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Yes, if my memory source miracle is a metro five year ago, at that moment, I was organised my sister's birthday party.

✓ Yes, if my memory serves me right, it was about five years ago when I organised my sister's birthday party.

The phrase 'if my memory source miracle is a metro' is incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'if my memory serves me right'. 'Was organised' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'I organised'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× She lives far away from my home.

✓ She lives far from my home.

The phrase 'far away from' is acceptable but 'far from' is more concise and commonly used. Both are correct, but 'far from' is preferred in formal speech.

× And I gave a surprise to my sister at that moment and me and my family members are very excited and felt over the moon at that moment.

✓ I gave a surprise to my sister at that moment, and my family members and I were very excited and felt over the moon.

The sentence has run-on issues and incorrect pronoun order. 'Me and my family members' should be 'my family members and I'. The tense should be consistent past tense 'were' and 'felt'. The sentence is split and restructured for clarity.