Watch— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện về độ rõ ràng, ngữ pháp và tính mạch lạc. Tránh lỗi từ (ví dụ “banky”, “rest”), chia câu đúng và giới thiệu câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Nên trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn với liên từ phù hợp (because, so, therefore). Ví dụ: nói rõ bạn không đeo đồng hồ, lý do chính, và một chi tiết minh hoạ.

Ví dụ: I don't usually wear a watch because I prefer wearing a small bracelet. The bracelet decorates my wrist and makes me feel fashionable and comfortable, so I find it more suitable for my style.

Gợi ý: Sửa ngữ pháp, trình tự ý và loại bỏ từ sai (ví dụ “fur”). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, giải thích cảm xúc và kết luận rõ ràng về kết quả. Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, so, but).

Ví dụ: Yes, my older brother bought me a watch when I passed my exams, and I was over the moon. It was actually my first watch, but unfortunately it didn't fit my wrist, so I kept it in my closet as a keepsake.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời tương đối rõ ràng nhưng có vấn đề nhỏ về liên từ (“from my point of view, but” không cần cả hai). Hãy dùng một mở đầu mạch lạc và bổ sung thêm một ví dụ cụ thể hoặc so sánh ngắn để thuyết phục hơn.

Ví dụ: In my opinion, people buy expensive watches to signal social status and wealth. For instance, many young professionals buy luxury brands to show financial stability and to make a good impression at networking events.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện từ vựng và sửa lỗi từ (ví dụ “puncture” sai nghĩa). Trả lời rõ ràng, dùng linking words (however, because, therefore) và thêm một câu minh hoạ ngắn để tăng tính thuyết phục.

Ví dụ: I don't think it's necessary to wear a watch because most people check the time on their smartphones. For me it's unnecessary since my phone is always with me; however, some people prefer watches because they look more professional and make a good impression.

× I don't wear a watch because I find more watches too banky for my rest is that I prefer a small bracelet that decorates my hand and makes me feel fashionable and comfortable.

✓ I don't wear a watch because I find most watches too bulky; for the rest, I prefer a small bracelet that decorates my wrist and makes me feel fashionable and comfortable.

The student used 'more watches' incorrectly instead of 'most watches' and 'banky' is not an appropriate word; the intended meaning is likely 'bulky'. 'Rest is that' is an incorrect connector; use 'for the rest' or restructure. 'Hand' is not the typical collocation for wearing a watch or bracelet; 'wrist' is correct. Suggestions: replace 'more' with 'most', use 'bulky' (or another suitable adjective), use a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses, and use 'wrist' instead of 'hand'.

× Oh definitely, my older brother bought me a watch as a gift when I passed my exams with flying colors. I was over the moon because it was my fur. First watch because but I didn't fit my wrist so I kept it for decoration in my closet.

✓ Oh definitely, my older brother bought me a watch as a gift when I passed my exams with flying colors. I was over the moon because it was my first watch, but it didn't fit my wrist, so I kept it as decoration in my closet.

Errors include fragmented and incorrectly ordered words: 'it was my fur. First watch because' should be 'it was my first watch'. Use past tense consistently: 'didn't fit' is correct but the sentence needs proper punctuation and connectors. Also use 'as decoration' rather than 'for decoration'. Suggestions: combine fragments into a single coherent sentence, correct word order, and maintain past tense.

× Well, from my point of view, but people buy expensive watches to signal their social status and wealth.

✓ Well, from my point of view, people buy expensive watches to signal their social status and wealth.

The conjunction 'but' is incorrectly used after 'from my point of view,' creating a conflict. Remove 'but' to make the sentence coherent. Suggestion: do not use contradictory conjunctions unless contrasting two ideas; here no contrast is needed.

× I don't think it's necessary to wear a watch. Most people take their time on their smartphone and for me it's not needed because my phone is always with me. However, some people wear a watch to look more professional and puncture.

✓ I don't think it's necessary to wear a watch. Most people check the time on their smartphones, and for me it's not necessary because my phone is always with me. However, some people wear a watch to look more professional and punctual.

'Take their time on their smartphone' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'check the time on their smartphone' and 'smartphone' should be plural when generalizing: 'smartphones'. 'It's not needed' is better as 'it's not necessary' for formality and clarity. 'Puncture' is the wrong word; the intended word is 'punctual' (adjective) meaning 'on time' or 'punctual'. Suggestions: use correct verb collocations ('check the time'), match singular/plural for general statements, and choose the correct adjective 'punctual'.