Computers— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some errors like 'human liver' instead of 'human labor'. Try to be more precise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, 'I often use a computer when working or performing tasks that require automation because it saves time and effort.'

Ví dụ: I usually use a computer when I am working or doing tasks that need automation. For example, it helps me complete repetitive jobs quickly, which saves my time and makes me happy.

Gợi ý: Your answer is too long and somewhat repetitive. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'at that time' to make your answer coherent.

Ví dụ: The first time I used a computer was in grade 10 when my father bought one for me. At that time, I used it mainly for homework, browsing the internet, playing games, and listening to music. However, I didn't use it for productive tasks back then.

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and lacks linking words. Try to combine sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to make your answer more natural and effective.

Ví dụ: As a software engineer, I cannot imagine my life without a computer because I use it daily for programming and professional work. Therefore, my daily tasks depend heavily on computers, and I would feel lost without one.

Gợi ý: Your answer is unclear and contains errors like 'tax' instead of 'task'. Try to use correct vocabulary and complete your sentences. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly and provide specific examples.

Ví dụ: It is difficult for me to use a computer when the task is very manual and does not require automation. For example, when I first bought a computer, I struggled because I did not know how to use the operating system or software properly.

× I use them quite often, especially when I'm working or whenever I do some talks that needs automation, then I usually use computer.

✓ I use it quite often, especially when I'm working or whenever I do some tasks that need automation, then I usually use a computer.

The word 'talks' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'tasks' which is plural. Also, 'needs' should be 'need' to agree with the plural noun 'tasks'. 'Computer' should have an article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. 'Them' should be 'it' to refer to 'a computer'.

× I think most of them are the tasks that normally require a lot of human liver.

✓ I think most of them are tasks that normally require a lot of human labor.

The word 'liver' is incorrect; the correct word is 'labor' meaning work. Also, 'the tasks' can be simplified to 'tasks' here for naturalness.

× Then I usually prefer doing it with a computer which makes me delighted as well as which saves my time, so.

✓ Then I usually prefer doing it with a computer which makes me delighted as well as saves my time.

The phrase 'which makes me delighted as well as which saves my time' is redundant; 'which' should not be repeated. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'so' which is unnecessary.

× Wow, it was way way long back whenever I was when I was I think in the grade 10 maybe.

✓ Wow, it was a long time ago when I think I was in grade 10 maybe.

The phrase 'way way long back' is informal and redundant; 'a long time ago' is better. The sentence structure is awkward and repetitive; it should be simplified for clarity.

× So then I used a computer my father bought me then and I used to do some homework, maybe search some Internet stuff and mostly gaming and music.

✓ So then I used a computer my father bought me and I used to do some homework, maybe search some internet stuff and mostly play games and listen to music.

'Gaming and music' should be 'play games and listen to music' to correctly express activities. 'Internet' should not be capitalized unless part of a proper noun.

× I used to also listen music back then.

✓ I also used to listen to music back then.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. The word order is improved by placing 'also' after 'used to'.

× So it was kind of a just manual talks and I didn't do anything productive back then.

✓ So it was kind of just manual tasks and I didn't do anything productive back then.

'Manual talks' is incorrect; it should be 'manual tasks'. The phrase 'a just' is incorrect; 'just' should not be preceded by 'a'.

× Since I'm a software engineer, I cannot think of my life without a computer. I need them on a daily basis.

✓ Since I'm a software engineer, I cannot think of my life without a computer. I need it on a daily basis.

'Computer' is singular, so the pronoun referring to it should be 'it' not 'them'.

× Since it is dependent on my life, it is dependent on my professional work.

✓ Since my life and my professional work depend on it.

The phrase 'it is dependent on my life' is awkward; the subject and object should be reversed for clarity. 'Depend on' is the correct verb phrase.

× I have to have a computer in front of me. I do all the programming stuff on my computer.

✓ I have to have a computer in front of me. I do all the programming work on my computer.

'Stuff' is informal; 'work' is more appropriate in this context.

× So I cannot think my life going anywhere without a computer.

✓ So I cannot imagine my life going anywhere without a computer.

'Think my life going anywhere' is incorrect; 'imagine my life going anywhere' is the correct expression.

× So my daily tasks and everything is dependent on computer and I think I will be lost without.

✓ So my daily tasks and everything are dependent on the computer and I think I will be lost without it.

'Tasks and everything' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Computer' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence ends abruptly; 'without it' is needed.

× I think if the tax is something that is very labored and if the tax does not require any automation and I'm not capable of using those software in my computer, then it is very hard for me to use the computer, especially if I don't know any software or program.

✓ I think if the task is something that is very laborious and does not require any automation and I'm not capable of using the software on my computer, then it is very hard for me to use the computer, especially if I don't know any software or program.

'Tax' should be 'task'. 'Labored' is incorrect; 'laborious' is the correct adjective. 'Those software' should be 'the software' or just 'software'. 'In my computer' should be 'on my computer'.

× For example, whenever I bought the computer for the first time, it has some operating.

✓ For example, when I bought the computer for the first time, it had some operating system.

The sentence is incomplete and uses incorrect tense. 'Whenever' should be 'when'. 'Has' should be 'had' to match past tense. 'Operating' should be 'operating system'.