Part 1
Giám khảo
In what conditions would you use a computer?
Thí sinh
I will use my computer for almost several things like writing a report or reading a paper because a computer has a big swing which can provide me a better view. Experience.
Giám khảo
When was the first time you used a computer?
Thí sinh
It was in my primary school. My father bought a computer for our home at that time. I use a computer to play online games. Later I began to use it to check my social medias like QQ or WeChat to keep in touch with my friends.
Giám khảo
What would your life be like without a computer?
Thí sinh
It will be less convenient because I rely on computer for most of my works, like writing a paper or writing a report. Without a computer I will type slowly on my phone or on a iPad.
Giám khảo
In what conditions would it be difficult for you to use a computer?
Thí sinh
When the Internet is not stable, using a computer will be a challenge for me because I used to researching for information or attending online classes. If the Wi-Fi is awake, this work can be really challenge.
In what conditions would you use a computer?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题,例如“a big swing”应为“a big screen”,且句子结构不够自然。建议简化句子,直接表达用途,并用正确的词汇描述电脑的优势。
Ví dụ: I use my computer for many tasks such as writing reports and reading papers because it has a large screen that offers a better view.
When was the first time you used a computer?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答内容较完整,但时态使用不够准确,且句子连接不够流畅。建议注意时态一致,使用连接词使回答更连贯。
Ví dụ: The first time I used a computer was in primary school when my father bought one for our home. At first, I used it to play online games, but later I started using it to check social media like QQ and WeChat to keep in touch with my friends.
What would your life be like without a computer?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答表达基本清楚,但有语法错误,如“a computer”前缺少冠词,且句子结构略显重复。建议使用更丰富的词汇和句型,避免重复。
Ví dụ: Life would be less convenient without a computer because I depend on it for most of my work, such as writing papers and reports. Without it, I would have to type slowly on my phone or iPad.
In what conditions would it be difficult for you to use a computer?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当,如“used to researching”应为“use it to research”,“Wi-Fi is awake”表达不准确。建议注意动词形式和词汇搭配,表达更准确。
Ví dụ: It is difficult for me to use a computer when the internet connection is unstable because I often use it to research information or attend online classes. If the Wi-Fi is weak, these tasks become very challenging.
× I will use my computer for almost several things like writing a report or reading a paper because a computer has a big swing which can provide me a better view. Experience.
✓ I use my computer for several things like writing a report or reading a paper because a computer has a big screen which can provide me a better view.
这里“will use”不符合习惯表达,描述习惯性动作应使用一般现在时“use”。另外,“almost several”搭配不当,应直接用“several”。“swing”应为“screen”,是拼写错误。
× I will use my computer for almost several things like writing a report or reading a paper because a computer has a big swing which can provide me a better view. Experience.
✓ I use my computer for several things like writing a report or reading a paper because a computer has a big screen which can provide me a better view.
“several”后面应接复数名词,且“Experience.”单独成句不合适,应与前句合并或删除。
× I use a computer to play online games.
✓ I used a computer to play online games.
描述过去发生的动作,应使用过去时“used”,而非现在时“use”。
× Later I began to use it to check my social medias like QQ or WeChat to keep in touch with my friends.
✓ Later I began to use it to check my social media like QQ or WeChat to keep in touch with my friends.
“social media”是不可数名词,不能加复数形式“medias”。
× It will be less convenient because I rely on computer for most of my works, like writing a paper or writing a report.
✓ It would be less convenient because I rely on computers for most of my work, like writing a paper or writing a report.
假设语气中应使用“would”而非“will”。“computer”应为复数“computers”,表示泛指。
× It will be less convenient because I rely on computer for most of my works, like writing a paper or writing a report.
✓ It would be less convenient because I rely on computers for most of my work, like writing a paper or writing a report.
“works”应为不可数名词“work”,表示工作内容。
× Without a computer I will type slowly on my phone or on a iPad.
✓ Without a computer I will type slowly on my phone or on an iPad.
“iPad”发音以元音音素开头,前面应使用不定冠词“an”而非“a”。
× When the Internet is not stable, using a computer will be a challenge for me because I used to researching for information or attending online classes.
✓ When the Internet is not stable, using a computer is a challenge for me because I usually research for information or attend online classes.
“used to researching”结构错误,应改为“usually research”表示习惯性动作。
× If the Wi-Fi is awake, this work can be really challenge.
✓ If the Wi-Fi is weak, this work can be really challenging.
“awake”用法错误,应为“weak”表示信号弱;“challenge”应为形容词形式“challenging”。