Computers— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达观点。

Ví dụ: I usually use my computer for work, such as creating tables and writing proposals. Computers are very convenient and help people complete tasks efficiently.

Gợi ý: 回答较为冗长且有语法错误，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并使用连词使句子更流畅。

Ví dụ: I first used a computer when I was about six or eight years old. My mother bought one for her work, and I used it to play games to relax after studying.

Gợi ý: 表达不够清晰，存在语法和用词错误。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免重复，并清楚表达观点。

Ví dụ: I can't imagine life without a computer because technology is essential for work and learning. Without it, people would find it difficult to acquire new knowledge or perform their jobs efficiently.

Gợi ý: 回答中存在时态混乱和表达不清的问题。建议使用正确的时态，简洁表达，并避免不必要的重复。

Ví dụ: It would be difficult to use a computer when I'm outside without access to electricity or a charger, as I need power to work and solve problems.

× I usually use my computer to work, especially for working.

✓ I usually use my computer to work, especially for work.

这里不应该用动名词working，而是用名词work，表示“工作”这个活动。动名词在这里用法不当。

× Nowadays people rely heavily on computers to work because they can use the computer to make different kinds of tables and do the to write a proposal and something like this because the the computer can make the biggest convenience of people so.

✓ Nowadays people rely heavily on computers to work because they can use the computer to make different kinds of tables and write proposals and things like that because the computer can bring the greatest convenience to people.

句子中“do the to write a proposal”结构错误，且“the biggest convenience of people”表达不自然，应改为“bring the greatest convenience to people”。此外，重复使用定冠词“the”错误。

× Actually, I can't retell that because there was a long time ago, but I do remember that maybe around six or eight, eight years old, that was my first time to to see the computer.

✓ Actually, I can't recall exactly because it was a long time ago, but I do remember that maybe when I was around six or eight years old, that was the first time I saw a computer.

“can't retell”用词不当，应为“can't recall”或“can't remember”。“there was a long time ago”时态和表达错误，应为“it was a long time ago”。“first time to to see the computer”结构错误，应为“first time I saw a computer”。

× My mom bought it for her job and at my daily time I would use it to play some computer game, which can help me to relax, especially after a day long studying.

✓ My mom bought it for her job and in my free time I would use it to play some computer games, which can help me relax, especially after a long day of studying.

“at my daily time”表达不正确，应为“in my free time”。“play some computer game”应为复数“games”。“help me to relax”中“to”可省略。

× So maybe that was my first. Time.

✓ So maybe that was my first time.

“first. Time”中间不应有句号，且time是单数，句子应连贯。

× So without a computer they can't, they can't learn new things or have their job to go more influently so.

✓ So without a computer, they can't learn new things or do their jobs more efficiently.

“have their job to go more influently”表达错误，应为“do their jobs more efficiently”。“influently”不是正确单词，应为“efficiently”。

× Probably when I was outside and there is no charge for me, because using the computer means you need to spend a long time to it and you need to use it to work and to handle some problems.

✓ Probably when I am outside and there is no way to charge it, because using the computer means you need to spend a long time on it and you need to use it to work and handle some problems.

“there is no charge for me”表达不当，应为“there is no way to charge it”。“spend a long time to it”应为“spend a long time on it”。

× But when you were outside you don't have any charge or any electric power, so it is hard to trust the computer and work.

✓ But when you are outside, you don't have any charge or electricity, so it is hard to rely on the computer and work.

时态应保持一致，使用现在时“are”。“any electric power”表达不自然，应为“electricity”。“trust the computer”应改为“rely on the computer”。