Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like drawing?
Thí sinh
For me, now I'm not a big fan of drawing, but I, I did like, I did like drawing when I was a kid and I drew, actually drew a lot of pictures and paintings. Umm and I also participated the competition when I was 7 and actually I get I got a good grade.
Giám khảo
Do you like to go to the gallery?
Thí sinh
To be honest, no, I'm not a big fan of visiting gallery, you know, I just like spending time spending time that I really interest in UMM. For me now I enjoy visiting UMM Jane because I love working out now, I love staying healthy and have a good.
Giám khảo
Do you want to learn more about art?
Thí sinh
Actually, no, I don't want to learn more about that. But I do want to learn more about language, especially English. I want to speak fluently on English and just talk like umm confidently with English, with foreigners. That made me feel.
Giám khảo
Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?
Thí sinh
Yes, definitely. I did a lot of drawing when I was a kid, especially when I was 10 years old and when at that time I enjoyed painting because that made me feel, umm, that made me feel a piece, uh, relaxed and I can escape. I could escape from the stress.
Do you like drawing?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答时语句不够流畅,有重复和语法错误,建议减少重复,注意时态一致,并且用连接词使表达更连贯。
Ví dụ: I am not very fond of drawing now, but I really enjoyed it when I was a child. I used to draw many pictures and even participated in a competition at the age of seven, where I received a good grade.
Do you like to go to the gallery?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答内容不够清晰,存在重复和语法错误,建议简洁明了地表达观点,避免重复,并使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ví dụ: To be honest, I don't enjoy visiting galleries. Instead, I prefer spending time on activities I am interested in, such as going to the gym because I love working out and staying healthy.
Do you want to learn more about art?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答不完整且表达不流畅,建议补充完整句子,避免语法错误,并用连接词连接观点。
Ví dụ: Actually, I am not interested in learning more about art. Instead, I want to improve my English skills so that I can speak fluently and confidently with foreigners.
Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答较好,但存在重复和语法错误,建议简化表达,避免重复,并使用连接词使句子更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. I did a lot of drawing when I was a kid, especially at the age of ten. Painting helped me feel relaxed and allowed me to escape from stress.
× I also participated the competition when I was 7
✓ I also participated in the competition when I was 7
动词participate后面需要加介词in,表示“参加某活动”。这里缺少介词in,导致用法错误。
× actually I get I got a good grade
✓ actually I got a good grade
句中出现了重复的动词get和got,且时态应为过去时got,去掉多余的get即可。
× I'm not a big fan of visiting gallery
✓ I'm not a big fan of visiting galleries
gallery是可数名词,表示“画廊”,此处应使用复数形式galleries,且前面有介词of,搭配正确。
× visiting gallery
✓ visiting galleries
gallery是可数名词,表示“画廊”,此处应使用复数形式galleries,表示一般意义上的多个画廊。
× spending time spending time that I really interest in
✓ spending time that I am really interested in
interest是动词,表达“感兴趣”时应使用被动形式interested,且需要主语I和be动词am,构成短语interested in。
× I really interest in
✓ I am really interested in
interest是动词,表达“感兴趣”时应使用形容词interested,且需要be动词am,构成正确表达。
× I enjoy visiting UMM Jane
✓ I enjoy visiting the gym
原句中的“UMM Jane”应为“gym”(健身房),且前面应加定冠词the。
× visiting UMM Jane
✓ visiting the gym
健身房gym前应加定冠词the,表示特指。
× I want to speak fluently on English
✓ I want to speak English fluently
动词speak后直接加语言名称,不用介词on,且副词fluently应放在动词后。
× speak fluently on English
✓ speak English fluently
副词fluently应放在动词speak之后,且speak后直接加语言名称,不用介词on。
× talk like umm confidently with English, with foreigners
✓ talk confidently in English with foreigners
表达“用英语自信地交谈”,应使用介词in English,且副词confidently放在动词talk之后。
× Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?
✓ Did you learn to draw when you were a kid?
learn后接动词时用不定式to do,表示学习做某事,learn drawing用法不当。
× I did a lot of drawing when I was a kid
✓ I did a lot of drawing when I was a kid
此句语法正确,无需修改。
× when at that time I enjoyed painting
✓ at that time I enjoyed painting
when和at that time重复,去掉when更通顺。
× that made me feel a piece, uh, relaxed
✓ that made me feel peaceful and relaxed
a piece用法错误,应使用形容词peaceful表示“平静的”,且连接词and连接两个形容词。
× I can escape from the stress
✓ I can escape the stress
escape后面一般直接加宾语,不用介词from。