Art— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeated phrases such as 'like'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy drawing. It has been my favorite hobby since childhood because both my parents are artists, and I used to paint with them every day.

Gợi ý: Your answer is good but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and clearer linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'rewind' and try to explain your reasons more specifically.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love visiting galleries because they allow me to relax and appreciate diverse artistic styles from around the world, especially the unique techniques each artist uses.

Gợi ý: Focus on clearer sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about how you learn about art.

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to learn more about art. Although I won't study it at university, I explore it as a hobby by reading books and watching documentaries to expand my knowledge.

Gợi ý: Avoid filler sounds like 'uh' and repeated words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific examples of your experience.

Ví dụ: Yes, my mother taught me to draw when I was three years old. Since then, drawing has been my favorite activity, and I have created several good oil paintings.

× It is my like all time favorite hobby since I was a child, very young child, because this was my, umm, mother and my father's job and I used to paint every single day with them.

✓ It has been my all-time favorite hobby since I was a child, a very young child, because this was my mother and my father's job and I used to paint every single day with them.

The phrase 'my like all time favorite hobby' is incorrect. 'Like' is unnecessary here and 'all time' should be hyphenated as 'all-time' when used as an adjective. Also, 'It is' should be 'It has been' to indicate a continuous state from past to present. The sentence structure is improved by adding 'a' before 'very young child' for clarity.

× It is such a good way for me to rewind and enjoy artists all around the world and the way of their expression in their arts, and I like to see every single artist's style especially.

✓ It is such a good way for me to relax and enjoy artists from all around the world and the way they express themselves in their art, and I especially like to see every single artist's style.

The phrase 'rewind' is incorrectly used; 'relax' fits better in this context. 'Artists all around the world' should be 'artists from all around the world' to correctly indicate origin. 'The way of their expression in their arts' is awkward; 'the way they express themselves in their art' is clearer and grammatically correct. 'Arts' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'art' is preferred.

× It is not my professional thing and I it is not the thing that I'm going to study in university, but it is my some kind of hobby to explore and have like more. Thing and knowledge about it.

✓ It is not my profession and it is not something that I'm going to study at university, but it is a kind of hobby for me to explore and gain more knowledge about it.

The phrase 'my professional thing' is incorrect; 'my profession' is the correct noun. The sentence had an extra 'I' causing confusion. 'Some kind of hobby' should be 'a kind of hobby'. 'Have like more. Thing and knowledge' is fragmented and unclear; 'gain more knowledge' is the correct expression. Also, 'study in university' should be 'study at university' for correct preposition use.

× Uh, my mother taught me how to draw since I was three years old and since then it has been my favorite thing to do and I've painted like UH-3 good paintings with oil painting.

✓ My mother taught me how to draw when I was three years old, and since then it has been my favorite thing to do. I've painted about three good paintings with oil paint.

The phrase 'since I was three years old' should be preceded by 'when' to indicate the time of teaching. 'Like UH-3 good paintings' is unclear and informal; 'about three good paintings' is clearer. 'Oil painting' as a noun is incorrect here; 'oil paint' is the correct term for the medium used.