Perfume— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid fillers like "uh". Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention a brief reason and an example of when you wear it to make the answer more concrete.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like perfume. My favourite is Gucci Floral because it combines floral and green notes that make me feel fresh. For example, I wear it every morning before work and it boosts my confidence when I meet people.

Gợi ý: Avoid exaggerated statements and repetition. Give a direct topic sentence, then add concise reasons and one specific example. Replace fillers with linking words (for example, moreover) and correct awkward phrasing like "it's that your perfume."

Ví dụ: Yes, I use perfume every day. I reapply it during the day because I want to stay fresh, and my classmates often compliment the scent. For example, I spray it before classes and after lunch when I return to school.

Gợi ý: Remove hesitations and correct grammar and awkward phrases. Start with a clear answer, then provide specific reasons and a short example of who you'd buy it for and why. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Ví dụ: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift because it feels personal and luxurious. For example, I might choose a subtle floral scent for my mother and a fresher unisex scent for a close friend, which shows I considered their preferences.

Gợi ý: Be more organized: give a clear main point, then compare examples with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and repetitions. State a balanced opinion and give a brief reason and example about longevity or brand differences.

Ví dụ: It depends on the brand and quality. For instance, celebrity fragrances can be pricey despite short longevity, while some niche or drugstore perfumes offer better value. Personally, I avoid expensive bottles if the scent doesn't last more than a few hours.

× Yes, I do like perfume or I have various types of them, but my most favorite one that I use on a daily basis is the Gucci floral one.

✓ Yes, I like perfume and I have various types, but my favorite one that I use daily is the Gucci Floral.

Pronoun 'them' is unnecessary after 'various types' because 'types' already implies plural items; use a simpler structure. 'Most favorite' is ungrammatical: 'favorite' already indicates the superlative, so use 'favorite'. 'I do like' is acceptable for emphasis but unnecessary; simple present 'I like' suits the context. Suggestion: remove redundant pronoun, avoid 'most favorite', and simplify for natural speech.

× Uh, I like the mix of the scents of flowers and nature.

✓ I like the mix of floral and natural scents.

The phrase 'scents of flowers and nature' is wordy and slightly awkward. Use 'floral and natural scents' for concise adjective use. This corrects adjective/adverb placement and improves natural phrasing. Suggestion: use adjective forms before 'scents' for clarity.

× Whenever I smell it, I always get a positive vibe.

✓ Whenever I smell it, I always get a positive feeling.

'Positive vibe' is informal but not ungrammatical; however 'vibe' is more colloquial. 'Feeling' is clearer in formal spoken English. Tense is correct (present simple for habitual action). Suggestion: prefer 'feeling' in formal contexts.

× I constantly reapply it throughout the day at school because I think it's a necessity to smell well nowadays.

✓ I constantly reapply it throughout the day at school because I think it is necessary to smell good nowadays.

'It's a necessity to smell well' is unidiomatic: 'smell well' misuses the adverb 'well' with the state of an odour; 'smell good' is the common collocation. Also 'it's a necessity to' is wordy; 'necessary to' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'smell good' and simplify structure.

× Uh, especially there's this one perfume that I keep using at school and everyone compliments it and it's that your perfume.

✓ Especially, there's one perfume I keep using at school and everyone compliments it; it's your perfume.

Original sentence has awkward pronoun placement and clumsy phrasing. 'It's that your perfume' is ungrammatical. Break into two clauses and use 'it's your perfume' for correct pronoun reference. Suggestion: split into shorter clauses and place pronouns after the verb for clarity.

× Uh, although it is gifted very often, especially girls often live gifted to each other.

✓ Although perfume is given as a gift very often, especially girls often give perfumes to each other.

'Live gifted to each other' is grammatically incorrect and makes no sense. The intended meaning is 'girls give perfumes to each other'. Use active voice 'give' instead of passive 'gifted' here for clarity. Also 'it is gifted' → 'perfume is given as a gift' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'give' for mutual gifting and correct word order.

× So yes, I think I can buy a perfume as a gift, but especially it's gonna be a good gift for your close friends or for even your parents or even your siblings.

✓ So yes, I think I could buy perfume as a gift, and it would be a good present for close friends, parents, or siblings.

'Gonna' is informal; use 'would be' or 'could be' for conditional/future-in-past nuance. 'For your close friends or for even your parents or even your siblings' is redundant; streamline list. Use 'present' instead of repeating 'gift'. Suggestion: use modal 'could/would' and avoid colloquialisms in formal responses.

× It really depends which perfumes we're talking about.

✓ It really depends on which perfumes we're talking about.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends'. 'Depends' requires 'on' plus object. This is a common structure error. Suggestion: remember 'depend on' collocation.

× For example, the Cristiano Ronaldo perfume, I believe that it's too expensive or however, some people believe that uh, it's actually cheap and it's affordable.

✓ For example, the Cristiano Ronaldo perfume: I believe it is too expensive, although some people think it is cheap and affordable.

Original has redundant pronouns and disfluent filler words. Use 'I believe it is' not 'I believe that it's'; streamline contrast with 'although'. Ensure pronoun 'it' clearly refers to 'the perfume'. Suggestion: remove filler words and use clear contrast markers like 'although'.

× But again, in my opinion, you just pay money for basically nothing before the because the perfume isn't even long lasting and it finishes.

✓ But again, in my opinion, you just pay money for basically nothing because the perfume is not long-lasting and it wears off quickly.

Sentence has extra words ('before the because') and tense/word-choice issues. Use 'is not long-lasting' and 'wears off quickly' for natural expression. Remove filler 'before the' which is erroneous. Suggestion: simplify clause structure, remove redundant words, and use standard collocations 'long-lasting' and 'wears off'.