Fishing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は意図は伝わりますが、文法ミス、冗長表現、不自然な語順があります。具体的には“I'm totally like to eat fish”は不自然で“totally”の位置や形が誤っています。“Fish is has variety of nutrients and plenty of very good ingredients for our body”は主語・動詞の一致と語の重複の問題があります。また“rely on eating fish and intake the iron”の表現も不自然です。改善方法：1) 短く明確なトピック文を使う（1文目で好みを述べる）。2) 支持情報は1〜2文にまとめ、文法的に正しい表現（動詞の形、冠詞、語順）を用いる。3) 接続語で論理を明確にする（例えば“because”）。4) 語彙は自然なコロケーションを使う（“rich in nutrients”, “get iron”）。

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I enjoy eating fish because it is rich in nutrients and a good source of iron. For example, salmon and mackerel provide healthy fats and minerals, so I try to include fish in my meals a few times a week.

Gợi ý: 意味は伝わりますが文法と自然さの問題があります。“I've totally rely”は時制と語形の誤りです（現在完了進行・受動など）。“purchase the specific fish”は不自然で“buy specific kinds of fish”が自然です。また最後の“but it's very hard to cook”は何が“it”を指すか曖昧です。改善方法：1) 動詞の形と時制を正しく使う（例：I usually rely on supermarkets）。2) 指示語は明確にする（“they are hard to cook”など）。3) 接続詞で対比を明瞭にする（“although”や“but”の使い方）。

Ví dụ: Yes, I have. However, I usually buy seafood from supermarkets these days because they are more convenient. The fish market is fun and you can buy specific types of fresh fish, although some of those fish are harder to prepare at home.

Gợi ý: 内容の論理が不明瞭で誤った因果関係や不自然な表現があります。“there's a there's less space to fish”は冗長で文法もおかしいです。“there are less pesticides in the city area because the Tokyo is overpopulated, so people are not”は意味が通りません（過密が農薬の少なさにどう繋がるか不明）。改善方法：1) 明確な理由を一つ挙げる（例えば時間がない、都市化で釣り場が減った等）。2) 文を簡潔にし、接続詞で理由を示す（“because”や“due to”）。3) 不必要な語句や繰り返しを避ける。

Ví dụ: No, fishing is not very popular. Although Japan has long coastlines, many people live in cities and have little free time, so urban residents rarely go fishing. As a result, recreational fishing is more common in rural areas than in big cities like Tokyo.

× Yes I do. I'm totally like to eat fish.

✓ Yes, I do. I totally like eating fish.

The original uses 'I'm totally like to eat fish' which mixes present continuous 'I'm' with the verb 'like' incorrectly and uses an infinitive where a gerund is natural after 'like'. Use 'I totally like eating fish' or 'I really like to eat fish'. Also add a comma after 'Yes'.

× Fish is has variety of nutrients and plenty of very good ingredients for our body.

✓ Fish has a variety of nutrients and many beneficial substances for our bodies.

The original contains 'is has' (duplicated verbs) and misses the article 'a' before 'variety'. 'Plenty of very good ingredients' is awkward; use 'many beneficial substances' or 'plenty of nutrients'. 'Our body' should be plural as 'our bodies' when referring generally to people. Correct word order and remove extra verb.

× So I will often rely on eating fish and intake the iron.

✓ So I often rely on eating fish to get iron.

Use 'I often rely on' (present habit) instead of 'I will often rely' which implies future. 'Intake the iron' is unnatural; use 'get iron' or 'obtain iron'. 'Rely on eating fish to get iron' is a natural collocation.

× Yes I have, but currently I've totally rely on the purchasing experience of the supermarket.

✓ Yes, I have, but currently I totally rely on the supermarket shopping experience.

'I've totally rely' mixes present perfect 'I have' with base verb 'rely' incorrectly; use present simple 'I totally rely' for current habits. 'Purchasing experience of the supermarket' is wordy—use 'supermarket shopping experience'. Add comma after 'Yes'.

× The fish market is very enjoyable and I can purchase the specific fish, but it's very hard to cook.

✓ The fish market is very enjoyable and I can buy specific fish, but they are often hard to cook.

'Purchase the specific fish' should be 'buy specific fish' or 'purchase specific fish' without 'the'. 'It's very hard to cook' is unclear—use plural 'they are often hard to cook' to refer to the fish. Also 'enjoyable' is okay but 'nice' or 'pleasant' are alternatives.

× No it isn't.

✓ No, it isn't very popular.

The short answer 'No it isn't.' is grammatically fine but sounds abrupt and lacks information. Adding 'very popular' clarifies the response. Also add comma after 'No'.

× Although Japan is surrounded by sea and beautiful rivers, there's a there's less space to fish.

✓ Although Japan is surrounded by the sea and has many beautiful rivers, there is little space for fishing.

The original has 'there's a there's less' duplicative and ungrammatical. Use 'there is little space for fishing' for uncountable 'space'. Use 'the sea' when referring to the surrounding sea in general. Use 'for fishing' instead of 'to fish' in this context.

× Besides, there are less pesticides in the city area because the Tokyo is overpopulated, so people are not.

✓ Besides, there are fewer pesticides in urban areas because Tokyo is overpopulated, so people do not fish much.

Use 'fewer' (countable) rather than 'less' for pesticides. 'The Tokyo' is incorrect—use 'Tokyo' without article. 'City area' is better as 'urban areas' or 'the city'. The clause 'so people are not' is incomplete; clarify as 'people do not fish much'.