Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar (use correct tense and subject-verb order), reduce repetition, and make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. For example, correct verb tense and possessive pronoun: “my family and I,” and use “because” once. Also mention a specific dish or atmosphere to add content.

Ví dụ: My family and I usually go to a buffet restaurant called Alukanet for my birthday. We enjoy it because everyone can choose their favorite dishes, and I usually focus on the seafood and desserts.

Gợi ý: Use past tense consistently and finish the thought. Begin with a clear topic sentence about past habits, then give one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words like “for example” or “because.” Avoid short fragments.

Ví dụ: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday with family and friends. For example, we often went to McDonald’s because it was child-friendly and had a play area where we could run around.

Gợi ý: Make the opinion clearer and avoid repetition. Use one concise topic sentence stating your view, then support it with a specific reason or memory using a linking word like “because” or “so.” Use correct tense for remembering past events.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think celebrating birthdays is important because they create lasting memories. For instance, I still remember my childhood parties, which helped me feel loved and connected to my family.

Gợi ý: Clarify the question (it asks about birthdays, not national holidays) and answer directly. If you mean important public celebrations, use correct vocabulary (e.g., National Day) and explain why with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like “memorize you” and incorrect word choices like “modification.”

Ví dụ: If you mean important national celebrations in China, the most important is National Day on October 1st because it commemorates the founding of the country and reminds people of their shared history and achievements.

× So usually I and my family went to the Alukanet restaurant.

✓ So usually my family and I go to the Alukanet restaurant.

The original sentence uses past tense 'went' but the question asks about habitual action 'What do you usually do', so present simple is required. Also word order 'my family and I' is the correct polite order. Use 'go' for repeated/habitual actions (present simple) and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subject 'my family and I' taking 'go'.

× So we love all you can eat because you can pick pick all the food you want until you full.

✓ We like the all-you-can-eat option because you can pick all the food you want until you are full.

The phrase 'all you can eat' should be hyphenated as 'all-you-can-eat' when used as a compound modifier or noun phrase. 'Love' is acceptable but 'like' is more natural here; however either is grammatical. The repetition 'pick pick' is an error. 'Until you full' lacks the verb 'are' and requires the adjective 'full' after the verb. Use 'you are full' or 'you get full'.

× So when I was a young, I did celebrate my birthday with my family and my friends.

✓ When I was young, I celebrated my birthday with my family and friends.

The phrase 'a young' is incorrect; 'young' functions as an adjective and does not take 'a' here. 'Did celebrate' is unnecessary emphatic past tense; simple past 'celebrated' is correct. Also omit the redundant 'my' before 'friends' for natural phrasing.

× So we went to the McDonald's because in McDonald's they have.

✓ We went to McDonald's because they have parties for kids / because they have a play area.

The original sentence is incomplete ('because in McDonald's they have.' ) and awkwardly repeats 'McDonald's'. Provide a complete clause explaining what McDonald's has (for example 'parties for kids' or 'a play area'). Also 'to McDonald's' is the correct prepositional phrase without 'the' in most contexts.

× Yeah, for me, it's essential to celebrate your birthday since you are a kid, because until now, I still remember when I celebrate my birthday party when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, for me it's important to celebrate birthdays when you are a kid, because even now I still remember my birthday parties from childhood.

Mixing 'it's' (present) with 'you are a kid' and 'I still remember when I celebrate' produces tense inconsistency. Use 'celebrate birthdays when you are a kid' (general present) and 'I still remember my birthday parties from childhood' (present perfect/simple past idea expressed naturally). Also avoid switching from 'you' to 'I' awkwardly; rephrase for coherence.

× I think the most important to celebrate in China is their Independence Day.

✓ I think the most important day to celebrate in China is National Day.

The original uses 'their Independence Day' which wrongly uses a plural possessive pronoun 'their' without a clear antecedent. In China the national holiday is commonly called 'National Day' (October 1). Use a noun phrase 'National Day' or 'the country's National Day' for clarity and correct pronoun reference.

× I don't know when, but it will memorize you about the struggle of the national to improve their modification.

✓ I don't know the exact date, but it reminds people of the nation's struggle to achieve progress.

'It will memorize you about' is ungrammatical: 'memorize' is transitive and not used this way. Use 'remind people' or 'remind you'. 'The struggle of the national' is incorrect; use 'the nation's struggle' (possessive noun) and 'to improve their modification' is unclear—likely meant 'to achieve progress' or 'to bring about improvements'. Also 'people' is a better general referent than 'you' here.