Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for better fluency. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more concise.

Ví dụ: Usually, I spend my birthday with my family because it is a special day when we express love and respect. This not only makes me happy but also strengthens our relationships.

Gợi ý: Try to avoid informal phrases like 'I guess' and improve sentence coherence by using linking words. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'me and my mother' to 'my mother and I'.

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I usually went to restaurants with my mother on my birthday because I loved trying new dishes.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and improve clarity by organizing your ideas logically with linking words. Also, correct grammar errors such as 'general' to 'generally'.

Ví dụ: I used to think celebrating birthdays was very important because it is a special day. However, now I believe it is just an ordinary day, although sometimes receiving gifts and attention makes it meaningful.

Gợi ý: Try to avoid vague expressions like 'maybe' and improve sentence structure. Also, use more precise vocabulary such as 'status' instead of 'attitude' and provide clearer reasoning.

Ví dụ: Although I have never lived in China, I think the oldest family member's birthday is the most important because they have higher status and respect in the family.

× this not only helps me to spend my time happily but also strengthens their relationship between us.

✓ this not only helps me to spend my time happily but also strengthens the relationship between us.

The phrase 'strengthens their relationship between us' is incorrect because 'relationship between us' should be preceded by a definite article 'the' and 'their' is unnecessary and confusing here. The correct phrase is 'strengthens the relationship between us.' This clarifies that the relationship is mutual and shared.

× So I used the opportunity on my birthday and me and my mother usually went to restaurants I guess.

✓ So I used the opportunity on my birthday and my mother and I usually went to restaurants, I guess.

The pronoun order and case are incorrect. 'Me and my mother' should be 'my mother and I' because 'I' is the subject of the verb 'went.' Also, the order 'my mother and I' is more polite and standard. This correction improves grammatical correctness and clarity.

× Well, I used to think that it's very important to celebrate your birthday as it's an unusual day.

✓ Well, I used to think that it's very important to celebrate your birthday as it's a special day.

The word 'unusual' is not the best choice here because it can have a negative or neutral connotation. 'Special' is a more appropriate adjective to describe a birthday, which is a positive and meaningful occasion. This improves the naturalness and appropriateness of the expression.

× However, now when I get older, I think it's just unusual day.

✓ However, now when I get older, I think it's just an ordinary day.

The phrase 'just unusual day' is incorrect because it lacks an article and 'unusual' does not fit the intended meaning. The correct phrase is 'just an ordinary day,' which means a normal, not special day. Also, the article 'an' is necessary before a singular noun starting with a vowel sound.

× Well, I've never considered it before because I have never lived in China.

✓ Well, I've never considered it before because I have never lived in China.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence.

× However, I think maybe it's important to celebrate the oldest one's birthday since they have more respect, more attitude in their family.

✓ However, I think maybe it's important to celebrate the oldest one's birthday since they have more respect and authority in their family.

The phrase 'more attitude' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'more authority' or 'more status.' 'Attitude' is not used to describe respect or position in a family. Replacing 'attitude' with 'authority' clarifies the meaning and improves correctness.