Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。例如，避免重复使用“passed”，并且补充更多细节说明写信的原因和感受。

Ví dụ: I usually write a letter to my grandfather on my birthday because he raised me and passed away when he was 85. I really miss him and writing helps me remember the positive things he taught me.

Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议简化句子结构，注意名词单复数和时态的正确使用，并且补充具体细节使内容更丰富。

Ví dụ: When I was young, I used to receive a box of chocolates for my birthday. Chocolate was not very popular in my country, so the boxes were usually beautiful, and I collected them every year.

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法和表达不准确的问题，建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意时态和词汇搭配，同时补充原因使回答更完整。

Ví dụ: Yes, my birthday is important to me, but I don't have big celebrations. I usually buy a box of chocolates for myself because I have been collecting chocolate boxes since I was a child.

Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误严重，表达不清晰，建议简化句子，使用正确的词汇和句型，明确表达观点并补充具体原因。

Ví dụ: In China, the first birthday of a baby is the most important because the first year is critical for the baby's survival, and families celebrate to wish the baby good health.

× Because he actually raised me up and he passed with passed away when he was 85 and I really miss him.

✓ Because he actually raised me up and he passed away when he was 85 and I really miss him.

这里“passed with passed away”是重复表达，正确用法是“passed away”表示去世。应去掉多余的“with passed”。

× He told me that positive.

✓ He told me positive things.

“that positive”结构不完整，缺少名词。应补充名词“things”使句子完整。

× When I was young, I would have a box of chocolate for my birthday at the last time.

✓ When I was young, I would have a box of chocolates for my birthday the last time.

“chocolate”应使用复数“chocolates”表示一盒巧克力中的多块巧克力；“at the last time”表达不自然，改为“the last time”更合适。

× Chocolate there was not popular in my home country and the boxes of chocolate is usually beautiful and I collect every boxer in my every bird.

✓ Chocolate was not popular in my home country and the boxes of chocolates are usually beautiful and I collect every box on my every birthday.

“Chocolate there was not popular”中“there”多余，应去掉；“boxes of chocolate”中“chocolate”应为复数“chocolates”；“is”应与复数主语“boxes”一致用“are”；“boxer”应为“box”；“bird”应为“birthday”。

× Yes, birthday is important to me, but I don't really have exaggerated celebration.

✓ Yes, birthdays are important to me, but I don't really have exaggerated celebrations.

“birthday”应使用复数“birthdays”表示一般情况；“celebration”应使用复数“celebrations”与前文呼应。

× I will have a box of chocolate for myself now because I kept a look continuous collecting chocolate the boxes for birthday.

✓ I have a box of chocolates for myself now because I keep continuously collecting chocolate boxes for birthdays.

“will have”不符合现在情况，应用现在时“have”；“kept a look continuous collecting”表达不正确，应改为“keep continuously collecting”；“chocolate the boxes”词序错误，应为“chocolate boxes”；“for birthday”应为复数“for birthdays”。

× The first year birthday of a baby is usually the most important birthday to celebrate in China because he misled to the baby survivor for the entire first year and they usually it's easy to be dead.

✓ The first birthday of a baby is usually the most important birthday to celebrate in China because it relates to the baby's survival during the entire first year, and babies usually are vulnerable.

“he misled to the baby survivor”表达错误，应改为“it relates to the baby's survival”；“they usually it's easy to be dead”语法混乱，应改为“babies usually are vulnerable”更准确表达意思。