Internet— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating when you began using the internet, then give one brief reason or context. Avoid filler words and repetition, and limit to up to 3–4 short sentences. Use correct place names and dates.

Ví dụ: I started using the internet in 2015 when I moved to Plymouth City. Before that, my hometown in the province had little or no internet access, so I couldn’t use it regularly. Moving to the city gave me my first reliable connection.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with frequency (e.g., daily, several times a day) and give one specific reason or example. Use linking words like because or so, but avoid hesitation and informal fillers. Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

Ví dụ: I go online several times a day because I use social media and messaging apps to keep in touch with friends. For example, I usually check my phone in the morning, during breaks, and in the evening.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence stating when and why you were not allowed to use the internet, then add one or two concise supporting details. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., past tense).

Ví dụ: Yes. In high school I wasn’t allowed to use my phone or other devices during the national exams. All electronic devices had to be turned off to prevent cheating, so I stayed offline for the whole exam period.

Gợi ý: State your opinion clearly (yes/no) and provide specific examples or consequences of spending too much time online. Avoid repetition and filler words; use linking words like because or for example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I often check my phone during class and late at night. For example, I sometimes lose sleep because I scroll social media instead of studying.

Gợi ý: Answer with one clear main idea (activities you would do) and provide specific examples. Use correct verb forms and linking words to show cause and effect. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Ví dụ: If I couldn’t use the internet, I would travel more and try different local foods to keep myself entertained. For instance, I would visit nearby towns, go hiking, and spend time with friends instead of using my phone.

× Also remember when I moved to Plymouth City so the Internet supply is available in the city compared to the rural area like my province.

✓ I remember when I moved to Plymouth City, the internet service was more available in the city than in the rural area where I come from.

Incorrect use of 'remember' phrasing and 'the Internet supply is available' is awkward and tense mismatch. Use 'I remember when I moved' for past memory and 'was more available' to compare past availability. Also use 'where I come from' or 'in my province' for clarity. Suggestion: use past tense and clearer comparative structure: 'the internet service was more available in the city than in the rural area where I come from.'

× So it might be like seeing uh 2015 that I moved to Penn Penn City.

✓ I think I moved there in 2015.

Use simple past to state when an action happened. 'It might be like seeing 2015' is ungrammatical and wordy. Use 'I moved there in 2015.' for clarity and correct tense.

× I would say I like frequently go online because, you know, young generation right now like me, uh, they tends to use a lot of the social media.

✓ I would say I frequently go online because the younger generation, like me, tend to use a lot of social media.

Problems: word order ('like frequently go'), incorrect article 'the young generation' (use 'the younger generation' or 'young people'), subject-verb agreement 'they tends' (plural subject 'they' with 'tend'). Use 'frequently go online' and 'tend to use social media.'

× So online is the first, umm, active that they use and that they always focus on.

✓ Being online is the main activity they use and what they always focus on.

'the first active' is incorrect word choice and article use. Use 'the main activity' or 'main thing' and correct noun 'activity.' Ensure verb forms match: 'what they always focus on.'

× So, uh, there was a time that I need to keep my phone and shut down all like my, umm, electrical, electrical devices.

✓ There was a time when I needed to hand in my phone and shut down all my electrical devices.

Tense mismatch: 'there was a time' requires past 'needed' not 'need.' 'Keep my phone' is unclear—use 'hand in my phone' if required. Remove duplicate words and unnecessary fillers.

× Uh, it was the time that I need to do the, umm, national exam, uh, in my high school.

✓ It was when I had to take the national exam in high school.

Tense and modal: use 'had to' for obligation in the past, not 'need to.' Use 'take the exam' rather than 'do the exam.' Also 'in my high school' can be simplified to 'in high school.'

× So I need to turn off it.

✓ So I needed to turn it off.

Pronoun placement and tense: in English the object pronoun should come after the verb phrase 'turn off' ('turn it off'), and use past tense 'needed' to match prior context.

× Umm yes, I definitely spend a lot of time online because you know, like people keep their eye on their phone every day even though they they in the class or outside the class.

✓ Yes, I definitely spend a lot of time online because people keep their eyes on their phones every day, whether they are in class or outside class.

Problems: plural/singular ('keep their eye' should be 'keep their eyes'), repetition 'they they', missing verb 'they are in class', and article use. Use 'whether' for alternatives and plural agreement for 'phones' and 'eyes.'

× So me myself as well.

✓ So I do as well.

'Me myself as well' is ungrammatical in subject position. Use 'I do as well' to match subject and verb.

× So I use my phone a lot.

✓ I use my phone a lot.

Remove unnecessary introductory 'So' unless linking to previous sentence; otherwise sentence is fine. This is a minor stylistic improvement.

× So if it is a time that I uh, required to not using any Internet, I would prefer to travel, traveling to other places, eating a lot of food.

✓ If I were required not to use the Internet, I would prefer to travel to other places and try a lot of food.

Use subjunctive/conditional 'If I were required' for hypothetical situations, and correct verb patterns: 'required not to use' and parallel gerunds 'travel and try food' or infinitives. Remove incorrect 'to not using.'

× So it helped me to umm, last focus on Internet or on my phone.

✓ That would help me to focus less on the Internet or my phone.

Word order and form errors: 'last focus' is incorrect; use 'focus less.' Use 'would help me' to match conditional, and include articles: 'the Internet' or 'my phone.'