Internet— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating when you began using the internet, then give one or two specific supporting details (age, how you connected, who provided service). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

Ví dụ: I started using the internet when I was about 14. By the time I was 15 I regularly used it on a home computer, which was connected via a LAN cable provided by Nepal Telecom, the government telecom company.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with frequency (e.g. every day/constantly). Use one or two clear reasons and avoid grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and avoid contradicting statements.

Ví dụ: I am online almost all the time because my internet is always connected and I do most of my work and socialising online. For example, I check messages and news updates throughout the day.

Gợi ý: Be concise and organize the story: give a short topic sentence (yes, when/where), then one clear specific example and consequence. Avoid unnecessary repetition and awkward phrasing.

Ví dụ: Yes. When I lived in a school hostel, mobile phones were banned by the warden, so we couldn’t use the internet openly. As a result, some students would secretly use their phones in the bathroom to avoid being caught.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion and a specific reason, and add one brief example of how it affects you. Avoid repetition and vague claims; use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do spend too much time online because I receive many messages and tend to reply immediately. For example, I often check and answer chats late at night, which reduces my sleep and study time.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with one main idea and one or two specific alternatives. Use conditional language correctly and avoid listing too many unrelated options. Provide a reason for your choice.

Ví dụ: If there were no internet, I would probably spend more time outdoors and socialising with friends, like playing in the courtyard. I might also read more books or help my family with farming, because those activities do not need online access.

× Now I know this would not be that the Internet was introduced when I was 14 years old.

✓ I know that the Internet was introduced when I was 14 years old.

The original sentence contains extra and misplaced words ('would not be that') that make the structure ungrammatical. Remove the unnecessary modal phrase to create a clear declarative sentence: 'I know that the Internet was introduced when I was 14 years old.' This matches the simple past reference to a past event.

× So from 15 years I studied using Internet on my computer.

✓ So from when I was 15 years old I learned to use the Internet on my computer.

The original lacks correct singular/plural and number expressions and incorrect verb collocation ('studied using Internet'). Use 'from when I was 15 years old' for age reference and 'learned to use the Internet' for the correct verb phrase. Also include the article 'the' before 'Internet.'

× Back in the time the computer, the Internet was connected through a LAN cable which was operated operated by Nepal Telecom, a government.

✓ At that time, the computer and the Internet were connected through a LAN cable operated by Nepal Telecom, a government agency.

Use 'at that time' for the time expression. Plural agreement: 'computer and the Internet were connected' or specify 'the computer and the Internet were'. Remove repeated word 'operated'. Add 'agency' after 'government' to make the noun phrase complete. Ensure verb agreement 'were connected.'

× Will my Internet connection is 24 hours so I am online 24 hours because everything I do is from the Internet.

✓ My Internet connection is 24 hours, so I am online all day because everything I do is on the Internet.

The initial 'Will' is incorrect and unnecessary. Use present simple 'My Internet connection is 24 hours' or better 'is always on.' Replace 'from the Internet' with 'on the Internet.' Use 'all day' instead of repeating '24 hours.'

× I walk and and take updates from the Internet.

✓ I browse and get updates from the Internet.

'Walk' is inappropriate here; likely intended 'browse' or 'scroll.' Use verbs that collocate with 'the Internet.' Remove duplicate 'and.' 'Get updates' is more natural than 'take updates.'

× Yes, there are various and multiple times that I wasn't allowed to use the Internet back in the school days and hostel days where mobile phones were not permitted by the hostel warden so we had to be.

✓ Yes, there were several occasions when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet during school and in the hostel because mobile phones were not permitted by the hostel warden, so we had to be careful.

The original mixes plural forms and awkward phrases ('various and multiple times', 'so we had to be') and uses wrong tense or forms. Use 'there were several occasions' and 'during school and in the hostel.' Complete the final clause with a clear verb phrase such as 'be careful.' Ensure past tense consistency ('were', 'was not permitted').

× We had to use the Internet in the toilet, in the washroom so that they do not find our mobile phones.

✓ We had to use the Internet in the toilet or washroom so that they would not find our mobile phones.

Use 'or' between similar locations. Maintain past-tense sequence: 'had to' with 'would not' instead of 'do not.' This keeps tense consistent and clarifies purpose.

× Yes, I think I spend much of my time online because my Internet is 24 hour connected and people message me, message me and I instantly reply to them.

✓ Yes, I think I spend much of my time online because my Internet is connected 24 hours and people message me, and I reply to them instantly.

Use present simple 'spend' is fine but improve phrase order: 'my Internet is connected 24 hours' is awkward; 'connected 24 hours' or 'always connected' is better. Remove repeated 'message me.' Put adverb 'instantly' after the verb for natural placement.

× So Internet also has brought me into new global era.

✓ So the Internet has also brought me into the new global era.

Include the definite article 'the' before 'Internet' and before 'new global era' to refer to a specific concept. Place 'also' after the subject 'the Internet' for natural word order.

× If Internet was not introduced then I would be working as a farmer or else I would be reading a book or playing with my friends in the garden or or in the courtyard.

✓ If the Internet had not been introduced, I would be working as a farmer, or I would be reading a book or playing with my friends in the garden or the courtyard.

This is a counterfactual conditional about the past, so use the past perfect in the 'if' clause: 'If the Internet had not been introduced.' The result clause correctly uses 'would be' for hypothetical present results, but article 'the' is needed before 'Internet' and avoid duplicated 'or.' Also add commas for clarity.