Part 1
Giám khảo
When did you start using the internet?
Thí sinh
When I was in junior high school, I started to using the Internet. I used to play games on the Internet and connecting with my friends.
Giám khảo
How often do you go online?
Thí sinh
I use the Internet just every day to keep in touch with my friend and browse some topics. In addition, I want to catch up with the news on the Internet.
Giám khảo
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
Thí sinh
No, I don't know what time I can't use the Internet because when I was born, the Internet still exists. Our daily life.
Giám khảo
Do you think you spend too much time online?
Thí sinh
Yes, I spend most of my time going online. I usually use my smartphone to chat with my friend and browsing some topics and so.
Giám khảo
What would you do without the internet?
Thí sinh
This is a quite difficult question for me, but I suppose that I want to play some musical instruments if I can use the Internet.
When did you start using the internet?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 文法の誤り("started to using"は不自然)を直し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげると流れが良くなります。
Ví dụ: I started using the Internet when I was in junior high school. At that time, I used it mainly to play games and connect with my friends online.
How often do you go online?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: "just every day"は不自然なので"every day"に直しましょう。また、複数形の"friends"を使い、接続詞で文をつなげて自然な流れにしましょう。
Ví dụ: I go online every day to keep in touch with my friends and browse various topics. In addition, I use the Internet to catch up with the latest news.
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 意味が伝わりにくいので、過去の経験について明確に答えましょう。また、文法と語順を改善し、自然な表現にしましょう。
Ví dụ: No, I can't remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because it has been a part of my daily life since I was born.
Do you think you spend too much time online?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: "going online"より"online"の方が自然です。また、"friend"は複数形にし、動詞の形も正しくしましょう。最後の"and so"は不要です。
Ví dụ: Yes, I spend most of my time online. I usually use my smartphone to chat with my friends and browse various topics.
What would you do without the internet?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 質問の意味を正確に理解し、インターネットがない場合の行動について答えましょう。文法も改善し、より具体的な内容を加えましょう。
Ví dụ: That's a difficult question, but if I didn't have the Internet, I would probably spend more time playing musical instruments and practicing music.
× When I was in junior high school, I started to using the Internet.
✓ When I was in junior high school, I started using the Internet.
'start' is followed by the verb in the -ing form without 'to'. The phrase 'started to using' is incorrect; it should be 'started using'.
× I used to play games on the Internet and connecting with my friends.
✓ I used to play games on the Internet and connect with my friends.
After 'and', the verb should be in base form to parallel 'play'. 'Connecting' is incorrect here; it should be 'connect'.
× I use the Internet just every day to keep in touch with my friend and browse some topics.
✓ I use the Internet every day to keep in touch with my friends and browse some topics.
The plural form 'friends' is needed because 'keep in touch with' usually refers to multiple people. Also, 'just' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for naturalness.
× No, I don't know what time I can't use the Internet because when I was born, the Internet still exists. Our daily life.
✓ No, I don't know when I couldn't use the Internet because when I was born, the Internet already existed in our daily life.
The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Can't' should be 'couldn't' to match past context. 'Still exists' should be 'already existed' to indicate past existence. Also, 'what time' should be 'when' for time reference.
× Yes, I spend most of my time going online. I usually use my smartphone to chat with my friend and browsing some topics and so.
✓ Yes, I spend most of my time going online. I usually use my smartphone to chat with my friends and browse some topics, and so on.
After 'and', verbs should be in base form to parallel 'chat'. 'Browsing' should be 'browse'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends'. 'And so' is incomplete; 'and so on' is correct.
× This is a quite difficult question for me, but I suppose that I want to play some musical instruments if I can use the Internet.
✓ This is quite a difficult question for me, but I suppose that I would want to play some musical instruments if I couldn't use the Internet.
The phrase 'a quite difficult' should be 'quite a difficult'. The conditional sentence about hypothetical situation requires 'would want' and 'couldn't use' to express unreal condition. 'If I can use' is incorrect here.