Internet— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答不够自然且表达不清晰，语法和词汇使用有误。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并使用正确的时态和词汇。

Ví dụ: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. At that time, I only used the internet on our home computer because smartphones were not common yet.

Gợi ý: 回答中时态混乱，表达不够连贯。建议使用正确的时态，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

Ví dụ: When I was young, I went online about once a week during the weekend because I had to go to school from Monday to Friday. However, now I use the internet all day, every day, because I need to interact with people online.

Gợi ý: 回答较为自然，但有语法错误和重复词汇。建议简化表达，使用更准确的词汇和句型。

Ví dụ: Yes, I remember when I was 15 years old, my mom didn't allow me to play computer games because it was bad for my eyes and health.

Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免模糊表达，并且句子结构要完整。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Nowadays, people often use their smartphones all day and have less face-to-face communication, which I think is bad. I want to change this habit.

Gợi ý: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，直接表达想法，并使用正确的词汇和语法。

Ví dụ: If I didn't have the internet, I would go out to nice places like the park or seaside with my friends. We would have a small trip and talk face to face.

× I thought you think tonight during I'm a primary school student, but at that time I just used the Internet on my E site on on our computer at home because the smartphone not happened that time.

✓ I thought you meant during the time when I was a primary school student, but at that time I just used the Internet on our computer at home because smartphones did not exist then.

句子中时态混乱，应该用过去时描述过去的情况。"smartphone not happened" 应改为 "smartphones did not exist"，表示过去不存在智能手机。

× because the smartphone not happened that time.

✓ because smartphones did not exist then.

这里应使用复数形式 "smartphones"，因为指的是智能手机这一类产品，而不是单一的某一部手机。

× So I just use Internet on the computer.

✓ So I just used the Internet on the computer.

描述过去的动作，应使用过去时态 "used"，而不是现在时 "use"。

× When I was young, I really go online about once a week in the weekend because I have go to school on the Monday to Friday.

✓ When I was young, I really went online about once a week on the weekend because I had to go to school from Monday to Friday.

描述过去习惯动作，应使用过去时 "went" 和 "had to go"。"in the weekend" 应改为 "on the weekend"。

× When I was young, I really go online about once a week in the weekend because I have go to school on the Monday to Friday.

✓ When I was young, I really went online about once a week on the weekend because I had to go to school from Monday to Friday.

时间短语应使用介词 "on the weekend" 而非 "in the weekend"，表示具体的时间点。

× But now I usually use the Internet all the day and every day because we have to interact with anybody in the online.

✓ But now I usually use the Internet all day, every day because we have to interact with people online.

"all the day" 应改为 "all day"，"in the online" 应改为 "online"，且 "anybody" 用于否定或疑问句，这里应使用 "people"。

× Yeah, I remembered once when I was 15 years because that's too late.

✓ Yeah, I remember once when I was 15 years old because that's too late.

"remembered" 是过去时，描述记忆时应使用现在时 "remember"。另外 "15 years" 应为 "15 years old"。

× I still want to, uh, play the games on the computer.

✓ I still wanted to play games on the computer.

描述过去的愿望，应使用过去时 "wanted"。"play the games" 中 "the" 不必要，应去掉。

× And then my mom, uh, told me you can't play that at all because it's, it's not good for your eyes and for your body health.

✓ And then my mom told me I couldn't play that at all because it's not good for my eyes and my health.

过去时态中，情态动词 "can't" 应改为过去式 "couldn't"。"your body health" 应改为 "my health"。

× Yes, I really think I spend too much time online because recently people always just play their smartphone all day and have less time to connect with NA, National Words and face to face talk with others.

✓ Yes, I really think I spend too much time online because recently people always just play with their smartphones all day and have less time to connect with others and talk face to face.

"play their smartphone" 应改为 "play with their smartphones"，"National Words" 可能是误说，应改为 "others"。

× because recently people always just play their smartphone all day and have less time to connect with NA, National Words and face to face talk with others.

✓ because recently people always just play with their smartphones all day and have less time to connect with others and talk face to face.

"connect with NA, National Words" 语义不清，应改为 "connect with others"。

× I think it's very terrible and I think I want to try.

✓ I think it's very bad and I want to try to change that.

"very terrible" 用词不当，应改为 "very bad"。句子不完整，"I want to try" 后应补充内容。

× I think we thought in tonight I choose to go out and pick up some good places, for example the park or seaside, have a little trip with my friends and we will sit on the public ways and talk to each other face to face.

✓ I think tonight I would choose to go out and visit some nice places, for example the park or seaside, have a little trip with my friends, and we will sit in public places and talk to each other face to face.

句子结构混乱，"we thought in tonight" 不合语法，应改为 "I think tonight I would choose"。"pick up some good places" 应改为 "visit some nice places"。"public ways" 应改为 "public places"。