Internet— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答不够连贯，存在重复和语法错误，建议回答时注意句子完整性和逻辑性，避免重复表达。

Ví dụ: I started using the internet when I was seven years old because my older sister bought a laptop for her university studies. At that time, I began exploring the internet and found it very interesting.

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不准确，建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，并避免重复。

Ví dụ: I go online every day, almost every minute, because I receive many messages from my colleagues and friends on my smartphone. Therefore, I am connected to the internet almost all the time.

Gợi ý: 回答不完整且语法混乱，建议明确表达时间和原因，使用完整句子。

Ví dụ: Yes, I remember that when I was in primary and middle school, my parents did not allow me to use the internet on weekdays to help me focus on my studies.

Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用恰当的词汇。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I rely on the internet to communicate with my friends and family, and for entertainment like watching TikTok videos and reading on social media.

Gợi ý: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议使用完整句子并清楚表达情感和计划。

Ví dụ: Without the internet, I would feel very anxious because I would lose contact with my family and friends. However, I would try to stay positive and focus on my hobby, bodybuilding.

× my older sister bought a laptop for his for his university.

✓ my older sister bought a laptop for her university.

这里使用了错误的物主代词“his”，应根据“older sister”使用“her”。物主代词错误属于代词使用错误。

× So for university. So I tossed the I'd use the Internet at that time.

✓ So for university, I was told I'd use the Internet at that time.

原句结构混乱，缺少主谓结构，且“tossed”用错，应为“was told”。需要调整句子结构使其通顺。

× And I found that very. I found that very.

✓ And I found that very interesting.

句子不完整，缺少形容词补充说明，导致表达不清。

× to my smartphone where accept many messages from my colleagues or friends.

✓ to my smartphone where I receive many messages from my colleagues or friends.

动词“accept”用错，应该用“receive”表示接收消息，同时缺少主语“I”。

× So I connected with the Internet every man and every moment.

✓ So I connect to the Internet every day and every moment.

“every man”用错，应为“every day”，表示频率。

× Maybe 1? I started at the week days, so when I was a child and when I started in primary school to middle school, my parents didn't allow me to use.

✓ Maybe once? I started on weekdays, so when I was a child and when I started primary school to middle school, my parents didn't allow me to use it.

“1”应为“once”，且“at the week days”应为“on weekdays”，缺少宾语“it”。

× my parents didn't allow me to use. Around me to reduce Internet because the thoughts that we are would.

✓ My parents didn't allow me to use the Internet around me to reduce it because they thought it was harmful.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，介词使用错误，表达不清。

× I think I'm, I'm a little bit addicted with the Internet because I rely on Internet to make communication with my all my friends and families and every entertainment I used to from the Internet such as a TikTok, the red note.

✓ I think I'm a little bit addicted to the Internet because I rely on the Internet to communicate with all my friends and family, and get entertainment from the Internet such as TikTok and Rednote.

“addicted with”应为“addicted to”，“make communication”应为“communicate”，“my all my friends and families”语序错误，应为“all my friends and family”。

× Without the Internet may living back me very anxiety because I I I will lose my connection with my family or an friend.

✓ Without the Internet, I may feel very anxious because I will lose my connection with my family or a friend.

“may living back me very anxiety”结构错误，应为“may feel very anxious”，且“an friend”应为“a friend”。

× But if that happened I would I would to keep my feet because I I'm really interested in bodybuilding.

✓ But if that happened, I would keep my fitness because I'm really interested in bodybuilding.

“would to keep my feet”错误，应为“would keep my fitness”，表达保持健康的意思。