Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers ("umm") and unnecessary repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if adding details. Aim for 2–3 sentences and correct minor grammar ("which had four wheels").

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a small red tricycle with four wheels, so I felt secure riding it around the neighborhood and could go to my friends’ houses without worrying about falling.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and coherence: begin with a clear opinion, use linking words (for example, moreover), correct subject-verb agreement, and provide one specific reason or example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in Mauritius. For example, most families own at least one bicycle for children, and many older people use bikes to run errands or go to the supermarket, which makes cycling a common daily activity.

× Yes, while I was a child I had a bike, a red one, which was with four wheels so I could, umm, bike everywhere I wanted and not fall off.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike, a red one, which had four wheels so I could ride everywhere I wanted and not fall off.

The sentence mixes word choices and tense forms. 'While I was a child' is awkward; 'when I was a child' is the natural temporal expression. 'Which was with four wheels' is incorrect phrasing for possession of parts; use 'which had four wheels.' The verb 'bike' used as a verb is informal and unusual with 'four wheels'; use 'ride' to refer to using a bike. Keep past tense consistent: 'had,' 'could,' and 'wanted' are correct. Suggestion: use natural temporal phrases, correct verbs for possession and action, and maintain consistent past tense.

× Bikes are quite common in Mauritius as in each family a child has to has a bike.

✓ Bikes are quite common in Mauritius because in each family a child has to have a bike.

This sentence has a verb form error and a small connector issue. 'Has to has' repeats incorrect 'has'; the correct modal construction is 'has to have' (modal-like obligation with base verb 'have'). Also 'as in' is awkward; 'because' or 'since' fits better to express reason. Suggestion: use 'has to have' and a clearer conjunction like 'because.'

× For example all my neighbors around their child has a bike and even older people do bike they they use their bike to go to the supermarket to go around.

✓ For example, all my neighbors' children have bikes, and even older people ride them; they use their bikes to go to the supermarket and get around.

Several agreement and word-choice errors: 'all my neighbors around their child has a bike' is ungrammatical. If referring to each neighbor's child, pluralize: 'neighbors' children have bikes.' That requires plural verb 'have.' 'Do bike' is unnatural; use 'ride' as the verb. Repetition 'they they' is a typo. Use plural nouns consistently ('bikes') and plural verbs ('have,' 'ride,' 'use'). Also improve sentence flow by splitting into two clauses joined by a comma and conjunction. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and choose appropriate verbs ('have' for possession, 'ride' for using bikes').