Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
If I had and that time I practiced to ride the bicycle with my, uh, my mother and I tried to, to ride a bicycle, uh, quickly.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
I think the bikes are not popular in my country is because the the traffic a public transfer transportation is uh uh, utilized for my country and all most people take the train.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答を明確で文法的に正しい現在・過去形で組み立て、冗長なフィラー(uh, um)を減らすこと。まず主題文で直接に答え、その後で一つか二つの具体的な詳細(誰と、どのように練習したか、どのくらいの頻度で)をつけると良い。接続詞(for example, so, because)を使って文を滑らかにつなげ、1〜3文で簡潔にまとめること。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike with my mother when I was about six, and we practised in the park every weekend. Because I practised often, I became confident and could ride quickly on my own.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: まず直接的に意見を述べ(Yes/No + short statement)、次に一つか二つの具体的な理由を順序立てて述べること。冗長な語句や繰り返し(the the, uh uh)を避け、正しい語順と語彙(public transport, trains)を使う。接続詞(because, however, although)で理由を明確にし、可能なら簡単な比較や例を加えると良い。全体を2〜3文で収めること。
Ví dụ: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because public transport is more convenient. Most people use trains and buses for long journeys, so cycling is less common except for short trips in quiet neighborhoods.
× If I had and that time I practiced to ride the bicycle with my, uh, my mother and I tried to, to ride a bicycle, uh, quickly.
✓ When I was a child I had a bicycle and at that time I practiced riding it with my mother and tried to ride quickly.
文の構造が混乱しており時制と語順の誤りがあるため、英語では時系列に沿って明確な主語と動詞を並べる必要があります。'If I had'は仮定法の始まりに見えますが、ここでは単に過去の事実を述べるので正しい導入は'When I was a child'です。'practiced to ride'は不自然で、動詞の後に動名詞を使い'rid ing'とします。また'with my, uh, my mother'の重複を避けて'with my mother'とし、'I tried to, to ride a bicycle, uh, quickly'の冗長な反復を削り'soon'や'adverb'を適切に配置して'and tried to ride quickly'とします。改善のためには、主節を明確にし、一度に一つの考えを表現し、動詞の形(動名詞 vs 不定詞)と時制を確認してください。
× I think the bikes are not popular in my country is because the the traffic a public transfer transportation is uh uh, utilized for my country and all most people take the train.
✓ I think bikes are not popular in my country because public transportation is widely used and most people take the train.
複数の誤りが混在していますが主に冠詞と語順の誤りが目立ちます。'the bikes'は一般論では冠詞不要で'bikes'が自然です。冗長な'is because the the'は削除し、'a public transfer transportation'は不自然なので'public transportation'とします。'is utilized for my country'は語法が不自然で'public transportation is widely used'とすると意味が明確になります。'all most people'は誤った表現で'most people'としてください。改善には冠詞の要不要を判断し(一般概念には冠詞を使わない)、定型表現(public transportation, widely used, most people)を覚えると良いです。