Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two supporting details with correct tense and linking words. Avoid vague fillers like “like” and informal phrasing such as “it was awesome for me.” Use past tense consistently and keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was in second grade, and I remember being very excited about it. Because it was my first means of independent transport, I rode it every day after school and practiced cycling in the nearby park.

Gợi ý: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific, coherent supporting details using linking words. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, word order) and avoid vague references like “in journal.” Use examples or comparisons to make your point concrete. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In rural areas, many adults use bicycles to travel to work because roads are narrow and public transport is limited. Furthermore, a lot of schoolchildren cycle to school, which is both economical and convenient for short distances.

× Yes, I usually buy when I was a kid and I remember I was in grade second when I got my first bike and it was like awesome for me.

✓ Yes, I usually bought a bike when I was a kid, and I remember I was in second grade when I got my first bike; it was awesome for me.

The sentence mixes present simple ('buy') with past time reference ('when I was a kid'), so past tense should be used ('bought'). Word order for 'second grade' should be corrected. Use a comma and conjunctions or a semicolon to connect clauses properly. Also remove filler 'like' which is informal and unnecessary. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events and improve clause punctuation. Suggested edits: replace 'usually buy' with 'usually bought', change 'grade second' to 'second grade', and remove 'like'.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.

This sentence is correct. It uses present simple appropriately to describe a general fact. No change needed.

× If I talk about like in journal, a lot of people say who are going to work, especially in the rural people areas, they usually go to their work on bikes and also a lot of like school students use bike to go to their schools.

✓ If I talk about what I have read in journals, many people who go to work, especially in rural areas, usually travel to work by bike, and many school students also use bikes to go to school.

The original sentence has several issues: incorrect conjunction/connector use ('If I talk about like in journal' is ungrammatical), inappropriate fillers ('like'), wrong relative clause word order ('a lot of people say who are going to work'), incorrect noun phrase ('rural people areas'), singular/plural mismatch ('use bike' should be 'use bikes'), and redundancy ('go to their schools'). Corrections: replace 'If I talk about like in journal' with 'If I talk about what I have read in journals' to express source; use 'many people who go to work' for the relative clause; use 'rural areas'; 'travel to work by bike' is a natural collocation; pluralize 'bikes' and simplify 'go to school'. Also remove excess fillers. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct relative pronoun placement, correct plural forms, and use natural prepositions ('by bike').