Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, my parents bought a bike for me when I was five. I still remember that time. Hardly had I got this bike when I felt a wave of excitement overwhelmed me. I really like this.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
I don't think so. In China there are several people would like to buy back because it is not convenient enough and. It is. Unefficient.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 句子情感丰富但有语法与自然表达问题。注意时态与常用表达:不要使用倒装(Hardly had I got...)来表达简单过去情绪,改用更自然的过去时或过去完成时;避免冗长或重复(“I still remember that time”与后面情绪可合并);保持回答在5句以内并直接回应问题,补充具体细节(例如车的颜色、是否学会骑、在哪里骑)以增强内容。
Ví dụ: Yes, my parents bought me a bike when I was five, and I remember feeling incredibly excited. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I practised riding it every day in the neighborhood park. Within a few weeks I learned to ride without help, which gave me a lot of confidence.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 表达不清晰且有语法错误与拼写错误。需直接给出立场并用逻辑连接词支持观点;避免不完整句(如“It is. Unefficient.”);使用准确词汇(inefficient而非 unefficient),并提供具体原因或例子(交通、公共交通替代、城市规划)。建议将句子合并并使用连接词如 because, however 或 for example 来组织信息。
Ví dụ: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my city because traffic is heavy and the roads are not always safe for cyclists. For example, most people prefer electric scooters or cars for convenience, and many residential areas lack bike lanes, which makes riding uncomfortable.
× Hardly had I got this bike when I felt a wave of excitement overwhelmed me.
✓ Hardly had I got this bike when a wave of excitement overwhelmed me.
句子使用过去完成时的倒装结构“Hardly had I got...”是可以的,但后半句出现了多余的主语“I”,导致意思重复且语法冗余。应把后半句改为“a wave of excitement overwhelmed me”或更自然地改为“It overwhelmed me”。建议:去掉多余的主语或改用更自然的表达。
× I really like this.
✓ I really liked it.
句子发生在过去(描述儿童时期获得自行车的经历),时态应为过去时,因此动词应改为过去式“liked”,同时指代前文的“bike”应使用代词“it”。另外这是对过去状态的感受,使用一般过去时更合适。建议:根据时间背景调整时态,代词指代要一致。
× In China there are several people would like to buy back because it is not convenient enough and.
✓ In China there are several people who would like to buy bicycles again because it is not convenient enough.
原句结构混乱,缺少关系代词“who”来连接主句与定语,且“buy back”用法不当,应为“buy bicycles again”或“buy them back”取决语境。还需完整表达原因,末尾残缺“and.”应删除或补全。建议:用关系代词连接从句,使用正确动词短语并完整表达句子。
× It is. Unefficient.
✓ They are inefficient.
此处指代应为“bikes”或“it is”不连贯。原文断句错误且单词拼写错误(“Unefficient”应为“inefficient”)。如果讨论自行车的便利程度,应使用复数主语和形容词“inefficient”。建议:注意指代一致、单词拼写并将句子合并成完整句。