Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct past tense, and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (e.g., because, so, and) and a short concluding remark. Also, correct vocabulary (e.g., “children’s bike,” “cousin,” “used to ride”).

Ví dụ: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. I saw my cousin’s children’s bike and wanted one, so my parents bought me a new bike with pedals. I used to ride it every day around our neighborhood because it was my favorite pastime.

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, furthermore). Use correct collocations (e.g., “affordable,” “produce less pollution,” “convenient for short trips”) and remove filler words. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to maintain. Furthermore, they produce less pollution than cars and are convenient for short trips in busy traffic. For these reasons, many people choose cycling as a daily transport option.

× Yes I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about 'when you were a child' (past time), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'had' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: use past simple for states or possessions in the past (I had).

× When I was a child I had seen a chi bike off my cousin brother so I get a little bit obsessed with that.

✓ When I was a child I saw a cheap bike owned by my cousin, so I became a little bit obsessed with it.

The student used 'had seen' and present 'get' incorrectly. 'Had seen' is past perfect and unnecessary here; simple past 'saw' is appropriate. 'Chi' likely means 'cheap'. 'Off my cousin brother' is incorrect phrasing and pronoun use; use 'owned by my cousin.' 'Get' should be past 'became' to match past narrative. Also use 'it' for the bike. Suggestion: use simple past verbs in sequence and correct noun/adjective order and pronouns.

× So I demand to my parents and they bought a new brand new bike for me.

✓ So I begged my parents and they bought a brand-new bike for me.

'Demand to my parents' is incorrect collocation; use 'begged' or 'asked my parents' and there is no 'to' after 'demand' in correct usage. Also 'new brand new' is redundant; use 'a brand-new bike.' Tense 'bought' is correct past simple. Suggestion: choose correct verb collocations (ask, beg, demand) and avoid redundancy.

× It was the child bike with the pedals in it.

✓ It was a children's bike with pedals.

Awkward wording 'the child bike' and 'with the pedals in it.' Use 'a children's bike' (or 'a child's bike') and concise phrase 'with pedals.' Suggestion: prefer natural noun phrases and concise modifiers.

× I used to every day when I was a child.

✓ I used to ride it every day when I was a child.

The phrase lacks a main verb and object. 'Used to' requires a base verb: 'used to ride.' Add 'it' to refer to the bike and specify frequency 'every day.' Suggestion: include the action after 'used to.'

× Yes, I think the bikes are more popular in my country as bikes are the cheap and they are also a budget friendly.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and budget-friendly.

Unnecessary comparative 'more popular' without comparison; present simple is fine. 'As' used incorrectly; use 'because.' 'The cheap' should be 'cheap' (adjective), and 'a budget friendly' should be 'budget-friendly' as adjective. Suggestion: use 'because' for reasons, correct adjective forms and hyphenation.

× So they are also a budget friendly.

✓ So they are also budget-friendly.

Repeats previous error: 'a budget friendly' is wrong because 'budget-friendly' modifies plural 'they' and does not need an article. Suggestion: remove article and hyphenate compound adjective.

× Moreover, they create a less pollution in my country.

✓ Moreover, they cause less pollution in my country.

'Create a less pollution' is ungrammatical. Use verb 'cause' with 'less pollution' (uncountable). Do not use 'a' before 'pollution.' Suggestion: use correct verb plus uncountable noun: 'cause less pollution.'

× So and it is a convenient way to uh bike or to have a ride in a traffic area also.

✓ They are also a convenient way to travel or ride in traffic areas.

Awkward structure and filler 'uh.' 'It is a convenient way to bike' is unnatural; bikes (they) are a convenient way to travel or to ride in traffic. Use plural agreement and plural 'areas.' Suggestion: remove fillers and restructure sentence for clarity.

× So I think it is a more popular in my country.

✓ So I think they are more popular in my country.

Incorrect pronoun 'it' referring to bikes (plural) and awkward comparative 'a more popular.' Use plural 'they are more popular' if comparing to other transport, or 'very popular' if not comparing. Suggestion: ensure subject number matches verb and use correct comparative or simple adjective.