Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변을 더 자연스럽고 논리적으로 만들려면 문장을 연결하고 불필요한 중복을 제거하세요. 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 이유와 구체적인 예를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어, ‘when I was eight’ 같은 시간 표현을 문장 맨 앞이나 맨 뒤에 자연스럽게 배치하고, 'from my parents' 대신 'my parents bought it for me'처럼 완전한 문장을 사용하세요. 또한 음, 그리고 같은 말버릇을 줄이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike when I was eight because many of my friends already owned one. My parents bought it for me, and I used it every weekend to ride around the neighborhood with them.

Gợi ý: 내용을 명확하고 구체적으로 정리하세요. ‘like’나 불필요한 반복을 줄이고, 이유를 두세 가지 구체적인 근거(교통수단, 운동, 환경친화성 등)로 제시하세요. 연결어(ex. because, also, for example)를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 이어가고 문법적으로 정확한 표현(going to work / commuting)을 쓰세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting to work and for short errands. Also, cycling is affordable and environmentally friendly, so you often see people riding bikes in cities and small towns.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was 8. Uh from my parents.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was eight; it was from my parents.

The sentence is awkward and fragmented. Use 'eight' in words for formality and join the fragments with a semicolon or conjunction. 'It was from my parents' clarifies possession. Keep past tense consistent. Suggestion: Write complete sentences and use connectors (for example, 'it was from my parents' or 'my parents bought it for me').

× Many of my friends already had bikes and I wanted to join them so I asked my parents and they bought 1 for me.

✓ Many of my friends already had bikes, and I wanted to join them, so I asked my parents and they bought one for me.

Use 'one' instead of numeral '1' in formal writing and include commas to separate clauses. The plural 'friends' and 'bikes' are correct; this correction addresses formatting and punctuation. Suggestion: Spell out small numbers in sentences and use commas before coordinating conjunctions joining independent clauses.

× Yes, I think like it's very popular because many of people use the bicycles for the transportation like going a company or just something.

✓ Yes, I think it's very popular because many people use bicycles for transportation, such as commuting to work or running errands.

Remove filler 'like' and the incorrect phrase 'many of people' (should be 'many people'). Use 'bicycles' without 'the' for general reference. 'For the transportation' should be 'for transportation'. 'Going a company' is incorrect; use 'commuting to work' or 'going to a company'. Suggestion: Avoid filler words, use correct collocations ('many people', 'for transportation'), and choose clear examples ('commuting to work', 'running errands').

× Something but and also we can see many of people using and straight.

✓ Also, we can see many people using them regularly and riding in straight lines on the road.

The original is fragmentary and uses 'many of people' incorrectly; use 'many people'. 'Using and straight' is unclear; clarify what 'straight' refers to — for example, 'riding in straight lines' or 'riding along the road'. Pronouns like 'them' can refer back to 'bicycles'. Suggestion: Avoid fragments, ensure pronouns have clear antecedents, and provide a complete verb phrase ('using them regularly', 'riding on the road').