Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details in chronological order using linking words (for example, "At first...", "Later..."). Reduce hesitations and repeated words. Also correct tense/use of numbers and articles (e.g., "grade 2", "grade 6", "a new bike").

Ví dụ: Yes. My dad bought me a bike when I was in grade 2. However, I didn't learn to ride it until grade 6 because I was afraid of falling. When I was in grade 6, I got a new bike and practiced every day until I became confident.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear opinion sentence followed by two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Avoid vague or repetitive words and fix grammar (use plural "bicycles" or "bikes", and compare properly: "not as convenient as"). Give a concrete example or statistic if possible.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people live in crowded urban areas where traffic and parking are difficult. Also, bikes are cheap and practical for short trips. For example, I see many commuters cycling to work every day on dedicated bike lanes.

× Umm, yes, my dad bought me a bike when I was in grade grade 2.

✓ Umm, yes, my dad bought me a bike when I was in grade 2.

This sentence has a redundancy and is otherwise correct in past tense. Remove the repeated word 'grade' to make it grammatically correct and concise.

× Uh, but I, but I didn't learn to ride it until I, I go to until I am grade 6 and that's and I change a new bike when I was grade 6 and, and that's not new bike that.

✓ But I didn't learn to ride it until I was in grade 6, and I got a new bike when I was in grade 6, but that wasn't a new bike.

Multiple problems: incorrect verb forms and tense consistency. Use past tense 'was' for school year reference ('I was in grade 6'). 'Go to' and 'am' are present forms and incorrect here. Use 'got' or 'received' for acquiring a bike in the past. Also clarify 'that wasn't a new bike' to correct meaning. Suggestions: keep verbs in past tense for past events, reduce repetitions, and split into shorter clauses for clarity.

× Oh yeah, absolutely. Bike is really, really extremely popular in my country.

✓ Oh yeah, absolutely. Bikes are really, really popular in my country.

Use plural 'Bikes' or the definite article 'The bike' depending on meaning. Here general statements about a category use plural count noun 'Bikes are...'. Also 'extremely' and 'really' together are redundant; choose one to avoid awkward emphasis.

× Could, umm, due to our, our, we're always living, uh, urban area rather than suburb area and the car is not convenient as uh, like United States or.

✓ This may be because we mostly live in urban areas rather than suburbs, and cars are not as convenient as in the United States.

Several grammar issues: 'due to' needs a noun phrase and better phrasing is 'This may be because'. Use plural 'urban areas' and 'suburbs'. 'The car is not convenient' is incorrect; use 'cars are not as convenient'. Also compare with 'in the United States' for correct preposition. Suggestions: use consistent pluralization, correct prepositions ('in the United States'), and a clearer causal connector ('because' or 'because of').