Study— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and choose accurate words (e.g., 'studying Swahili' and 'different culture'). Keep within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

Ví dụ: I'm currently a student at the University of Dutch Law, studying Swahili. It's a unique and challenging subject, but I find it fascinating because learning the language helps me understand a different culture.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and give a direct location and one brief detail. Use a single clear sentence for location, then one linked sentence for a supporting detail. Correct phrasing like 'I study at' and avoid repeating 'now'.

Ví dụ: I study at Udal Salam University. I major in Swahili, which I find challenging but rewarding because it lets me explore a different culture.

Gợi ý: Be grammatically accurate and more specific. Use a topic sentence stating your opinion, then one or two supporting details with correct noun forms and verb tenses (e.g., 'a good library', 'I've made many good friends and teachers who help me').

Ví dụ: Yes, it's a great place to study because the library is well stocked. Also, I've made many good friends and supportive teachers who help me with my studies.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence then one specific improvement with a brief reason. Use linking words like 'however' and avoid filler words ('you know').

Ví dụ: I'm generally satisfied with my university; however, if I could change one thing, I would add more green spaces such as small parks or gardens because they would provide peaceful places to relax and study.

Gợi ý: Correct word choice and avoid informal contractions. State your plan clearly, replace incorrect phrase 'forcing bad relations' with the intended meaning (e.g., 'improving strained relations'), and give one concise reason. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: After I finish my course, I hope to become a diplomat focused on improving relations between China and East Africa. I want to promote communication and cultural exchange to strengthen ties between the regions.

× And now I'm a student at the University of Dutch Law.

✓ And now I'm a student at the University of Dutch Law.

No change needed: 'at' correctly indicates attendance at an institution. Keep as is.

× I'm majoring Swahili, which is a pretty unique field of study.

✓ I'm majoring in Swahili, which is a pretty unique field of study.

Use the verb 'major' with the preposition 'in' when specifying a subject of study: 'major in Swahili.' Suggestion: always use 'major in + subject.'

× I find it really fascinating to learn about difficult culture through its language.

✓ I find it really fascinating to learn about a different culture through its language.

The adjective 'difficult' is incorrect in context; 'different' fits the intended meaning. Use 'different culture' to express learning about another culture. Also ensure 'its' correctly refers to the culture's language.

× Now I'm starting in university Udal Salam and now I'm majoring in Swahili, which is a pretty unique field of study.

✓ I'm now starting at Udal Salam University and I'm majoring in Swahili, which is a pretty unique field of study.

Use 'starting at' plus the institution name and place 'University' after the name or use 'Udal Salam University.' Avoid repeating 'now' twice. Also use 'at' rather than 'in' for a university.

× Yes, it's a good place for my studying and it has good library.

✓ Yes, it's a good place for my studies and it has a good library.

Use plural 'studies' to refer to one's academic work. Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'good library.' 'My studying' is unidiomatic here; prefer 'my studies.'

× Also I made very I made many good students and teacher which helps me a lot.

✓ Also I have made many good friends and met many helpful teachers who help me a lot.

Original is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'have made' when describing experiences to date. 'Students' likely meant 'friends.' Use 'teachers' plural and 'who help' to agree with plural subject. Provide clearer nouns and correct verb agreement.

× Yeah, and but I'm quite comfortable with my university.

✓ Yes, I'm quite comfortable with my university.

Using both 'and' and 'but' together is redundant and ungrammatical. Choose one conjunction or simply 'Yes' to respond naturally.

× But if I could change one thing, I'd like to add more green space.

✓ But if I could change one thing, I'd like to add more green space.

No change needed: conditional structure 'If I could..., I'd like...' is correct for hypothetical changes.

× Space, you know, like small, small parks or gardens.

✓ I mean small parks or gardens,

'Space' is acceptable but awkwardly repeated. 'I mean' clarifies the example. Remove repetition for natural speech.

× Once I finish my course, my main goal is to become a diplomat.

✓ Once I finish my course, my main goal will be to become a diplomat.

For a future intention following 'Once I finish,' use future tense 'will be' to show plan after completion. 'Is' can sound like a present, but 'will be' is clearer for future outcome.

× I'm really keen on forcing bad relations between China and East Africa.

✓ I'm really keen on improving relations between China and East Africa.

'Forcing bad relations' is incorrect and opposite meaning. Use 'improving relations' to express the intention to make relations better. 'Keen on' is followed by a gerund: 'keen on improving.'

× Essentially, I wanna help build a bridge for communication and cultural exchange in that region.

✓ Essentially, I want to help build a bridge for communication and cultural exchange in that region.

Replace informal 'wanna' with standard 'want to.' Use 'want to' followed by the base verb 'help.' This fits formal speaking contexts.