Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you work or are you a student?
Thí sinh
Currently I am college student and it's my senior years now.
Giám khảo
Where do you study?
Thí sinh
I study in Haiku, Hainan Province is Haikou University of Economics. That was a play where is excellent weather. Many people go to there for enjoying the scenery.
Giám khảo
Is it a good place to study?
Thí sinh
Yes, I believe it is good place to study because there can helped me boost energy and reduce stress. For example, I often go to there with my college friends and have light conversation.
Giám khảo
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Thí sinh
Yes, I would like few changes to place where I study because I enjoying seeing different landscapes and can gain various experience. For example, I always study in islands.
Giám khảo
What are your future study plans?
Thí sinh
To be honest, I have some study plans for my future because I want to improve my professional skills and get better job opportunity, so I will uh, I will study uh online course and I will study a new language.
Do you work or are you a student?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 改进方向:句子需要更自然和语法正确。可以使用完整的主谓结构并加上冠词,同时保持简洁。练习点:用正确时态和冠词表达身份和年级。
Ví dụ: I am currently a college student, and I’m in my final year.
Where do you study?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 改进方向:需要更准确的地名、主谓一致和句子连贯性。避免不必要的词汇和语法错误,并用连词连接信息。练习点:先说明学校名称和地点,再描述天气和吸引人的地方,句子不宜过长。
Ví dụ: I study at Haikou University of Economics in Haikou, Hainan Province. The city has excellent weather, and many people go there to enjoy the beautiful scenery.
Is it a good place to study?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 改进方向:注意时态和助动词的用法,主语和谓语需一致。用更自然的表达说明原因,并用连词衔接例子。练习点:使用具体活动描述如何减压,例如散步、聊天等。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think it’s a great place to study because the environment helps boost my energy and reduce stress. For example, I often go there with my college friends to chat casually and relax.
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 改进方向:回答需更明确,先说明是否希望改变,再具体列出想要的改变。注意动词形式和冠词使用,避免模糊或不相关的信息。练习点:给出一到两个具体的改变并解释原因。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like a few changes. For instance, I wish there were more quiet study spaces and better transportation to the nearby islands, so I could enjoy different landscapes and learn from new experiences.
What are your future study plans?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 改进方向:避免填充词(uh),使用更流利的句子结构并具体说明计划内容和时间。可举例说明想学的课程类型或语言。练习点:用一到两句描述目标、具体措施和预期结果。
Ví dụ: I have several study plans: I want to improve my professional skills by taking online courses in my field, and I also plan to learn a new language, such as English or Mandarin, to increase my job opportunities.
× Currently I am college student and it's my senior years now.
✓ Currently I am a college student and it's my senior year now.
句子中缺少不定冠词“a”,并且“senior years”应为单数“senior year”表示最后一年。建议在表示职业或身份时使用“a/an”;表示在校的最后一年用单数。
× I study in Haiku, Hainan Province is Haikou University of Economics.
✓ I study in Haikou, Hainan Province at Haikou University of Economics.
原句结构混乱,使用了错误的动词“is”。应使用介词“at”表示在某所大学学习。建议用“in + 地名, at + 学校名”的结构。
× That was a play where is excellent weather.
✓ That place has excellent weather.
原句‘That was a play where is excellent weather’结构错误且单词拼写('play'应为'place')错误。应直接说“That place has excellent weather”。建议保持主语+动词+宾语的基本句子结构。
× Many people go to there for enjoying the scenery.
✓ Many people go there to enjoy the scenery.
“go to there”是不正确的搭配,应直接用“go there”。动词短语“for enjoying”也不自然,改为不定式“to enjoy”。建议使用固定搭配和正确动词形式。
× Yes, I believe it is good place to study because there can helped me boost energy and reduce stress.
✓ Yes, I believe it is a good place to study because it can help me boost my energy and reduce stress.
缺少冠词“a good place”。“there can helped me”时态与语态错误,应为“it can help me”。“energy”前通常加所有格“my”。建议注意冠词、主语一致和动词原形。
× For example, I often go to there with my college friends and have light conversation.
✓ For example, I often go there with my college friends and have light conversations.
同样“go to there”应为“go there”。“have light conversation”可数名词应使用复数“conversations”或加不定冠词“a light conversation”。建议注意固定搭配与可数名词形式。
× Yes, I would like few changes to place where I study because I enjoying seeing different landscapes and can gain various experience.
✓ Yes, I would like a few changes to the place where I study because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and can gain various experiences.
“would like few changes”需要不定冠词“a few”。“to place”缺少定冠词“the place”。“I enjoying”应为“I enjoy”动词形式错误。“various experience”经验为可数名词时用复数“experiences”。建议注意冠词、动词形式和可数名词复数。
× For example, I always study in islands.
✓ For example, I always study on islands.
表示在岛上学习时应使用介词“on”而不是“in”。若指具体某些岛屿,也可说“on the islands”。建议根据上下文选择“on”或加定冠词。
× To be honest, I have some study plans for my future because I want to improve my professional skills and get better job opportunity, so I will uh, I will study uh online course and I will study a new language.
✓ To be honest, I have some study plans for the future because I want to improve my professional skills and get better job opportunities, so I will study online courses and learn a new language.
原句冗长且含口语填充词“uh”。“get better job opportunity”缺少复数或冠词,应为“better job opportunities”或“a better job opportunity”。“study online course”应为复数“study online courses”或“take an online course”;学习语言用“learn a new language”更自然。建议去掉语气词,调整名词复数与动词搭配,保持简洁。