Study— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 직접적이지만, 문장이 다소 중복되고 명확하지 않은 부분이 있습니다. 예를 들어, "I consider myself a student"와 "I have more study nowadays"는 좀 더 간결하고 명확하게 표현할 수 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 다듬고, 중복되는 표현을 줄이는 연습을 하세요.

Ví dụ: I recently graduated from university, but since I'm not working yet and continuing my studies, I still consider myself a student.

Gợi ý: 답변이 주제에 맞게 시작되었으나, 문장이 중간에 끊기고 중복된 단어('and and')가 있어 자연스럽지 못합니다. 또한, 문장이 완성되지 않아 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 완성하고 중복된 단어를 제거하며, 연결어를 적절히 사용해 보세요.

Ví dụ: I usually study at the Maple Library because it offers a quiet and comfortable atmosphere, and it's conveniently located near my house.

Gợi ý: 답변이 주제에 맞고 이유를 제시했으나, 문장 구조가 다소 어색하고 반복되는 표현이 있습니다. 'I mean'과 같은 구어체 표현은 시험에서 피하는 것이 좋으며, 문장을 더 간결하고 명확하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, it's a great place to study because it is always quiet and peaceful, unlike cafes where noise can be distracting.

Gợi ý: 답변이 구체적이고 여러 개선점을 제시했으나, 'Umm finally'와 같은 불필요한 말이 포함되어 자연스러움을 떨어뜨립니다. 또한, 문장 연결이 조금 더 매끄럽게 이루어질 수 있습니다. 불필요한 말은 줄이고, 연결어를 활용해 문장을 부드럽게 연결하세요.

Ví dụ: The library is nice and comfortable, but I wish it were open on Mondays. Also, I would like more comfortable seating and additional charging stations to make studying easier.

Gợi ý: 답변이 명확하고 구체적인 계획을 제시했으나, 'IL score'는 'IELTS score'로 정확히 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 'study about vocalization and opera related score like all the books' 부분은 어색하므로 더 자연스럽고 구체적으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ví dụ: If I achieve a good IELTS score, I plan to study abroad in the US to pursue a master's degree in music. I am passionate about opera and want to study vocal techniques and opera scores in depth.

× I graduated university recently but I'm not working yet, so I consider myself a student and also I have more study nowadays, so yeah, I'm a student.

✓ I graduated from university recently but I'm not working yet, so I consider myself a student and also I have more studies nowadays, so yeah, I'm a student.

The phrase 'graduated university' is missing the preposition 'from' which is necessary in this context. Also, 'more study' should be 'more studies' to correctly use the plural form when referring to multiple study activities or subjects.

× Also and I often go to Maple library since it is conveniently located near my house and and also the library is.

✓ Also, I often go to Maple library since it is conveniently located near my house and the library is comfortable.

The sentence contains redundant conjunctions 'and and also' which is incorrect. The sentence should be simplified by removing extra conjunctions and completing the thought for clarity.

× Yeah, it's really good place to study because first it's really quiet and peaceful.

✓ Yeah, it's a really good place to study because first it's really quiet and peaceful.

The phrase 'really good place' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'really good place' which is necessary for singular countable nouns.

× I mean, when people study, when I study at the cafe, I can't avoid noise, but library is always quiet.

✓ I mean, when people study, when I study at the cafe, I can't avoid noise, but the library is always quiet.

The noun 'library' is singular and countable, so it requires the definite article 'the' to specify which library is being referred to.

× Well the place is really nice and comfortable but unfortunately it is closed on Monday so I wish it could be open on that day.

✓ Well, the place is really nice and comfortable but unfortunately it is closed on Monday so I wish it would be open on that day.

The modal verb 'could' is used for ability or possibility, but here expressing a wish about a future or hypothetical situation requires 'would' to indicate desire or preference.

× Also, I would like it to have more comfortable sitting areas to make studying easier.

✓ Also, I would like it to have more comfortable seating areas to make studying easier.

The word 'sitting areas' is incorrect; the correct term is 'seating areas' which refers to places designed for sitting.

× Umm finally more charging area.

✓ Umm, finally, more charging areas.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding commas and pluralizing 'area' to 'areas' makes it a clearer and more complete phrase.

× If I get a good IL score, I plan to study abroad in the US.

✓ If I get a good IELTS score, I plan to study abroad in the US.

The abbreviation 'IL' is unclear and likely a typo for 'IELTS', which is the correct term for the English language test. Also, 'the US' is correct as it is a country name requiring the definite article.

× I want to pursue a masters degree in music because I am passionate about opera.

✓ I want to pursue a master's degree in music because I am passionate about opera.

The term 'masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe to indicate possession.

× Also I want to study about vocalization and opera related score like all the books.

✓ Also, I want to study vocalization and opera-related scores like all the books.

The verb 'study' does not require the preposition 'about'. Also, 'opera related score' should be hyphenated as 'opera-related scores' and pluralized to match the context.