Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you work or are you a student?
Thí sinh
I'm a student I'm studying on a high school I'm on 11th grade. My school names is Abyss schools and I really enjoying studying on my school. I really like it and it's my latest year on this school.
Giám khảo
Where do you study?
Thí sinh
Mostly I study in school, but uh, when I go home I will study uh more than uh in school because in school I more I have time with my friends and discussion with them and. At home I must.
Giám khảo
Is it a good place to study?
Thí sinh
I think it's a good place to study because most of teachers are really good in their in their subjects and are really it's help me now on there help me have been have knowing their subjects, and I really want that I study on my school.
Giám khảo
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Thí sinh
Now, because my school is a new school and I like it mostly things that it has no, my answer is no, I don't want make any.
Giám khảo
What are your future study plans?
Thí sinh
My future study plans its past the exam past the aisles and go a study to university and I really want studying on business faculties and in the future I will be stewardess and study in gives me a knowledge it it it does me happier.
Do you work or are you a student?
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Ví dụ: I am currently a student in the 11th grade at Abyss School. I really enjoy studying there because it offers a great learning environment. This is my final year at this school, and I am looking forward to graduating.
Where do you study?
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Ví dụ: I usually study at school, but I spend more time studying at home because at school I often socialize and discuss with my friends. Therefore, I focus more on my studies when I am at home.
Is it a good place to study?
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Ví dụ: I believe my school is a good place to study because most teachers are very knowledgeable in their subjects. Their support has helped me understand the material better, which motivates me to continue studying there.
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
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Ví dụ: Since my school is relatively new and I like most of its features, I do not want any changes to be made at the moment.
What are your future study plans?
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Ví dụ: My future plan is to pass the exams and enter university. I want to study business because I am interested in this field. In the future, I hope to become a stewardess, which will give me valuable experience and make me happy.
× My school names is Abyss schools and I really enjoying studying on my school.
✓ My school's name is Abyss School and I really enjoy studying at my school.
The phrase 'My school names is' is incorrect because 'school' is singular, so 'name' should be singular and possessive ('school's name'). Also, 'Abyss schools' should be singular as it refers to one school. 'I really enjoying' is incorrect; it should be 'I really enjoy' to match the present tense. 'Studying on my school' should be 'studying at my school' because 'at' is the correct preposition for locations like schools.
× My school names is Abyss schools and I really enjoying studying on my school.
✓ My school's name is Abyss School and I really enjoy studying at my school.
The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by the -ing form of the verb, but here 'enjoying' is incorrectly used as the main verb without auxiliary. The correct form is 'I really enjoy'.
× I'm studying on a high school I'm on 11th grade.
✓ I'm studying at a high school. I'm in 11th grade.
The preposition 'on' is incorrect here. We say 'study at a school' and 'in 11th grade' to indicate location and grade level respectively.
× My school names is Abyss schools and I really enjoying studying on my school.
✓ My school's name is Abyss School and I really enjoy studying at my school.
The word 'names' should be singular 'name' because it refers to one school. Also, 'Abyss schools' should be singular 'Abyss School'.
× At home I must.
✓ At home, I must study.
The sentence is incomplete. 'Must' is a modal verb and needs a main verb to complete the meaning. Adding 'study' completes the sentence.
× Mostly I study in school, but uh, when I go home I will study uh more than uh in school because in school I more I have time with my friends and discussion with them and.
✓ Mostly, I study at school, but when I go home, I study more than at school because at school I spend more time with my friends and discussing with them.
The preposition 'in' is incorrect; 'at school' is the correct phrase. Also, 'discussion with them' should be 'discussing with them' to use the verb form after 'and'.
× I really like it and it's my latest year on this school.
✓ I really like it and it's my last year at this school.
The phrase 'latest year on this school' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'last year at this school' to indicate the final year of attendance.
× My future study plans its past the exam past the aisles and go a study to university and I really want studying on business faculties and in the future I will be stewardess and study in gives me a knowledge it it it does me happier.
✓ My future study plans are to pass the exam, pass the aisles, and go to study at university. I really want to study in the business faculty, and in the future, I will be a stewardess. Studying gives me knowledge and makes me happier.
The original sentence has multiple tense and structure errors. 'Its past' should be 'are to pass' to express future plans. 'Go a study' should be 'go to study'. 'Want studying' should be 'want to study'. 'Study in gives me a knowledge' is incorrect; it should be 'studying gives me knowledge'. Also, 'does me happier' should be 'makes me happier'.
× My future study plans its past the exam past the aisles and go a study to university and I really want studying on business faculties and in the future I will be stewardess and study in gives me a knowledge it it it does me happier.
✓ My future study plans are to pass the exam, pass the aisles, and go to study at university. I really want to study in the business faculty, and in the future, I will be a stewardess. Studying gives me knowledge and makes me happier.
The article 'a' before 'study' is incorrect; it should be 'to study'. Also, 'business faculties' should be 'business faculty' as a singular field of study. 'Be stewardess' needs the article 'a' before 'stewardess'.
× I think it's a good place to study because most of teachers are really good in their in their subjects and are really it's help me now on there help me have been have knowing their subjects, and I really want that I study on my school.
✓ I think it's a good place to study because most of the teachers are really good in their subjects and they really help me to know their subjects. I really want to study at my school.
The sentence has pronoun errors and awkward phrasing. 'Most of teachers' should be 'most of the teachers'. 'Are really it's help me now on there help me have been have knowing their subjects' is incorrect; it should be 'they really help me to know their subjects'. 'I really want that I study on my school' should be 'I really want to study at my school'.