Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you work or are you a student?
Thí sinh
I am a student, I'm a high school student. I am studying science and biology and Japanese. All subject is very difficult for me but I am make efforts to good at them.
Giám khảo
Where do you study?
Thí sinh
I am studying at Waseda High School. It is not famous uh in the Japan, but the this high school is very good because there is many problem to learn about fallen languages.
Giám khảo
Is it a good place to study?
Thí sinh
My high school is Waseda High School, so there is many teacher UH graduated from Waseda University, so the education is very good, better than other high school.
Giám khảo
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Thí sinh
Actually my high school don't have a eating space to eat eat lunch, so we have to eat in the classroom. There is classroom is not. Clean.
Giám khảo
What are your future study plans?
Thí sinh
I am I want to go the university on other countries, so I have to study English and Spanish and Spanish is not necessarily to grow into the university, but Spanish is very useful so I learn.
Do you work or are you a student?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答は直接的で良いですが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば、「I am make efforts to good at them」は正しくは「I make efforts to get better at them」などです。より自然な英語表現を使い、文法を正しくすることが必要です。
Ví dụ: I am a high school student studying science, biology, and Japanese. Although these subjects are quite challenging, I make a strong effort to improve in all of them.
Where do you study?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 内容が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。「fallen languages」の意味も不明確です。質問に対して明確で具体的な説明をし、正しい語彙を使うことが重要です。
Ví dụ: I study at Waseda High School. Although it is not very famous in Japan, it offers excellent programs, especially for learning foreign languages.
Is it a good place to study?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 文法の誤り(複数形の扱いなど)や繰り返しが見られます。より簡潔で正確な文を心がけ、接続詞を適切に使って論理的に話す練習をしましょう。
Ví dụ: Waseda High School is a good place to study because many teachers graduated from Waseda University, so the quality of education is better than at other high schools.
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 文法ミスや不自然な表現が多いです。例えば、「my high school don't have」は「doesn't have」が正しいです。また、内容を明確に伝えるために、文を整理し、具体的に説明しましょう。
Ví dụ: Actually, my high school doesn't have a designated eating area, so we have to eat lunch in our classrooms, which are not very clean.
What are your future study plans?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 文法や語順の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。将来の計画を明確に述べ、理由を簡潔に説明する練習をしましょう。
Ví dụ: I want to attend a university in another country, so I am studying English and Spanish. Although Spanish is not required for admission, I find it very useful, so I am learning it.
× All subject is very difficult for me but I am make efforts to good at them.
✓ All subjects are very difficult for me but I am making efforts to be good at them.
The word 'subject' should be plural 'subjects' because it refers to multiple subjects. Also, 'is' should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject. 'I am make efforts' is incorrect; it should be 'I am making efforts' to use the correct present continuous form. 'to good at them' should be 'to be good at them' to use the correct infinitive form.
× It is not famous uh in the Japan, but the this high school is very good because there is many problem to learn about fallen languages.
✓ It is not famous in Japan, but this high school is very good because there are many problems to learn about foreign languages.
The preposition 'in the Japan' is incorrect; it should be 'in Japan' without 'the'. 'There is many problem' is incorrect; 'there are many problems' is correct because 'problems' is plural. 'fallen languages' is likely a mistake for 'foreign languages'.
× My high school is Waseda High School, so there is many teacher UH graduated from Waseda University, so the education is very good, better than other high school.
✓ My high school is Waseda High School, so there are many teachers who graduated from Waseda University, so the education is very good, better than other high schools.
'There is many teacher' is incorrect; it should be 'there are many teachers' because 'teachers' is plural. 'Other high school' should be 'other high schools' to match plural form.
× Actually my high school don't have a eating space to eat eat lunch, so we have to eat in the classroom.
✓ Actually, my high school doesn't have a eating space to eat lunch, so we have to eat in the classroom.
'My high school don't have' is incorrect; it should be 'doesn't have' because 'high school' is singular and requires third person singular verb. Also, 'a eating space' should be 'an eating space' because 'eating' starts with a vowel sound.
× There is classroom is not. Clean.
✓ The classroom is not clean.
The sentence structure is incorrect and awkward. It should be 'The classroom is not clean.' to correctly use the adjective 'clean' to describe the classroom.
× I am I want to go the university on other countries, so I have to study English and Spanish and Spanish is not necessarily to grow into the university, but Spanish is very useful so I learn.
✓ I want to go to university in other countries, so I have to study English and Spanish. Spanish is not necessarily required to enter university, but Spanish is very useful, so I learn it.
'I am I want' is redundant; 'I want' is sufficient. 'Go the university on other countries' should be 'go to university in other countries' because 'go to' is the correct preposition and 'in' is used for countries. 'Spanish is not necessarily to grow into the university' is incorrect; it should be 'Spanish is not necessarily required to enter university.' 'So I learn' should be 'so I learn it' to clarify the object.