Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you work or are you a student?
Thí sinh
Honestly, I'm a student at high school which is located on Hong Yue St. and I'm going to grade 12.
Giám khảo
Where do you study?
Thí sinh
Like until I'm study in in high school which is located on Huang Yu St.
Giám khảo
Is it a good place to study?
Thí sinh
Absolutely yes because the the environment is very cool very good. My school one have all equipment to have students study well.
Giám khảo
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Thí sinh
Honestly, I'm a bit confused about whether I want to change anything at my study place because it's perfect to study.
Giám khảo
What are your future study plans?
Thí sinh
So my goal is that I want to aim a good score at all subjects I study and then I'm going to be an excellent student.
Do you work or are you a student?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời của bạn nên ngắn gọn và trực tiếp hơn, tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "Honestly" và nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "I'm going to grade 12" thành "I'm in grade 12" để tự nhiên hơn.
Ví dụ: I'm a high school student currently in grade 12 at a school on Hong Yue Street.
Where do you study?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ thừa, bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc đúng.
Ví dụ: I study at a high school located on Huang Yu Street.
Is it a good place to study?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ như "the the" và dùng từ phù hợp hơn thay vì "cool" để mô tả môi trường học tập. Ngoài ra, câu nên rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn.
Ví dụ: Yes, it's a great place to study because the environment is quiet and comfortable, and the school provides all the necessary equipment for students.
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn thay vì nói mơ hồ như "a bit confused". Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "Honestly" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu tự nhiên hơn.
Ví dụ: I don't think I would like to change anything because my study place is already perfect for me.
What are your future study plans?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Bạn nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "So" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu rõ ràng hơn. Nên thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.
Ví dụ: My goal is to achieve good scores in all my subjects so that I can become an excellent student.
× Like until I'm study in in high school which is located on Huang Yu St.
✓ I am still studying in high school which is located on Huang Yu St.
The original sentence uses 'I'm study' which is incorrect. The correct present continuous form is 'I am studying'. Also, 'Like until' is unnecessary and confusing, so it is removed for clarity.
× My school one have all equipment to have students study well.
✓ My school has all the equipment for students to study well.
The subject 'My school' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'all equipment' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the equipment, and 'to have students study well' is better expressed as 'for students to study well'.